Experimental Poetry Form: Mixture

The following experimental poetry form is a mixture of syllable count, rhyme and meter.  It consists of eight lines with the following syllable counts, rhyming pattern, and meters:

Syllable count      Rhyming pattern              Meter

8                                     A                               Iambic
6                                     A                               Iambic
4                                     B                               Trochaic
5                                     C                               Trochaic with stressed last syllable
5                                     C                               Trochaic with stressed last syllable
4                                     B                               Trochaic
4                                     B                               Trochaic
8                                     A                               Iambic

Here is an example of a poem using this experimental poetry form:


With large brown eyes they seemed to gawk,
up at the flying hawk,
quickly hopping,
hastily about,
silently with doubt,
swiftly popping,
never stopping,
the rabbits bounced away with shock.

Poem with an explanation: The pedals turned

The pedals turned

The pedals turned.  The creak began.  The rhythm was like background percussion to a song.  Around the turn, the shade disappeared, and the sun shown bright.  Another turn, and the pedals turned, but with a sense, that they were bound, by rubber bands.  Past the place where the opossum died, past the place where the dog runs out, past the place where the grass is high, and whips what gets too close.  Out of the cave, and into the open, at some point a sense of relief.  The creak is still there, warmed up and even more consistent, but the rubber bands have been loosened.  The road is long, and cars drive by, and thankfully seem to want avoidance.  At the end, another road.  Long too.  Shorter, but seems longer.  Then at the red sign, a stop and a check of the number – only four.  Only four.  The pedals turn.  Difficult after the stop.  And a place at five where shade and quiet are is sought.  The moment of pause, in the shade, where no cars are.  The shirt gets adjusted, the shorts get adjusted, the legs stand, and then relax.  The pedals turn.  Over the bridge, past the water with the green lilies, and back to the road.  It’s longer now, in the other direction.  Six.  Another red sign.  Only six and a half.  Lawn mowers hum.  They block the creak and make a cocoon.  Around a turn.  Looking for eight.  Only seven.  Up the hill.  Going down is fun.  Up the hill.  Pedal.  Pedal.  Pedal.  At the top, around the turn.  Creak.  The rubber bands are back.  Then a turn.  Down a small hill – not as fun as the large.  Then a turn. Eight point five.  Near the end.  Where is ten?  Near the end.  Nine.  But only a half.  Up the road.  Checking the number.  At a point, spin around.  Back around.  Almost done.  Finally the pedals stop.


This poem follows a bicycle ride.  It is in part based on reality and in part based on imagination.  The reality comes from a combination of times.  In some ways the poem is a train of thought poem.  The thoughts flow along with the imagined ride.  The poem was written in a style to stress the imagery and to have a certain ambiguous quality so that different levels could be read into the poem.  Like many poems, the lines have a literal meaning, but they also could be interpreted by a reader to have metaphorical meanings.

Poetry topic idea: Evaporation

Evaporation is an interesting poetry topic idea because of the ideas that it can lead to.

For example, starting with evaporation, a poet can examine the idea of loss.  They could write about a lake that evaporates or water from a glass.  They could examine the process or look it at it as it completes (for example, when the last of the water is gone from the lake).  This could be used either directly or metaphorically.

From another point of view, evaporation could be viewed as leading to growth.  Water that evaporates from one place, can be rained down on another.

To take a less direct approach, a poet could examine the evaporation of something other than water.  They could look at subjects as wide spread as a chemical in an industrial process to a liquid on another planet.

Additionally, to take a less obvious approach, a poet could examine evaporation from the point of view of the change of state:  a liquid turning to a gas.  This could be used as a metaphor for many transitions.

A poet also might look at evaporation from the point of view of the cooling it can provide, and write a poem about relief.

In addition to the ideas above, there are many other ideas that the poetry topic idea of evaporation can lead to.

Artwork to inspire poetry: The orange chair

The Orange Chair

Above is a piece of artwork the can inspire poetry.  Here is a poem inspired by this artwork:

The orange chair is upon the rug, within the room with the wood floor.  It’s large and soft with a frame of wood inside.  The outside is cloth – not leather.  It is not the shiny cloth.  The kind that almost seems oily.  It is regular cloth.  Cloth with little lines sown in it.  The chair fits.  It fits on the rug.  It fits in the room.  Its color fits.  Orange seems right.  Behind the chair is a wall.  It’s covered in plaster.  Real plaster.  On lathe strips.  It’s painted orange.  A light orange.  A faint orange.  The wall, the floor, the rug.  They fit.  They fit with the chair.  The orange chair.

The oak leaf sits,
upon the tree,
within the forest.

Poetry Book: First Try: A series of poems: Poem one: A stone in concrete

Starting today and for the next five following Mondays, one poem from M. Sakran’s collection of poetry entitled First Try, published by eLectio Publishing, will be featured on this blog.  These poems are the first six poems in the collection.  First Try is available here:


Here is the first poem:

A stone in concrete

Alone in the grayness of same,
the lock of strength holds on always,
and makes the small existence still.
The force and weight of tons of mass,
compress the life of captive held,
and does not slow or move away,
because the held does not matter.

To send M. Sakran a comment about this poem or the collection, please use the form below:

A Poem: Peppercorns

The last few peppercorns, just one layer thick, at the bottom of the mill.  Little, pointed, black spheres – waiting.  A whole column.  Hundreds.  Turned and ground and spread.  Dust is still at the bottom.  Little black specks.  Some white.  Some brown.  A smell.  Aroma.  The layer waits for the turn.  Soon parts will disappear.  Then a quarter.  Then a half.  They all will fall in.  And soon they are dust.

wood is fed
into the wood chipper
clouds dissolve

Poem with an explanation: Disillusionment

The walls are strong and permanent,
and feel as if they have substance and weight,
they form the room,
and can be leaned against,
and pushed,
but they seem as if it could not affect them,
they seemed as if they were timeless,
as if they were in some way,
But there’s a time,
when for some reason,
the wall is damaged,
and looking inside,
at powder and paper,
brings a doubt.
But then there’s a time,
when carpet is lifted,
and concrete is shown,
with strips of tack,
and there’s a doubt.
But then,
at some point,
there’s a time,
when the wall is taken down,
with a hammer and a saw,
and it’s in pieces,
and chunks,
that fill wheel barrows.
And there’s a realization,
the wall appeared to be solid,
it appeared to have substance and weight,
it appeared to form the room,
it seemed as if it could stand,
and not be affected,
as if it was timeless,
as if it was fundamental,
this was not true,
the wall was not timeless,
it was not permanent,
it was not a given,
it was not fundamental,
it was built,
by hands,
and it could,
be moved,
and changed,
and torn down.
The wall,
was not solid.
The wall was not really there.


As given by the title, this poem is about disillusionment.  In this case, the idea of disillusionment is presented using the metaphor of a wall in a house.  If thought is not given to a wall in a house, it can, in some ways, seem like a permanent thing.  Yet, when a wall is damaged, or moved, or torn down, there is a realization that it has no permanence.  While before, a wall may have seemed in some way to be fundamental, once something happens to it, there is a realization that it is not.  This is, in a sense, a disillusionment.  The idea of a wall was used in the poem as a metaphor to present the idea of disillusionment.

Experimental Poetry Form: Simple Rhyming Pattern

The following experimental poetry form is a simple rhyming pattern.  Other than the rhyming pattern, there is no other structure to the form.  The rhyming pattern is as follows:


Here is an example of a poem using this form:

Upon the bread was the tuna fish,
it was so placed upon a glass dish,
there was lettuce and tomato too,
and yellow mustard in a line,
a few pickles that were small,
and some chips of which there were nine,
and next to it a glass of soda topped with foam,
and this was served to one who had no home.