Post Series: The Poems with Explanations Series: Moment

Moment

An unclear fine instant known but a mystery,
a second of breath and maybe a thought,
then somehow it’s gone but nothing is clear.
A second of breath known but a mystery,
then somehow it’s gone and maybe a thought,
an unclear fine instant but nothing is clear.

 

The above poem is about the instant right before death.  It was imagined as being in a hospital.  A person was imagined lying in a bed right before the moment they died.

The poem was written using the experimental poetry form: word counts, word groups, and repeats.  The form affected the poem.

The first line is about the moment right before death.  That moment is unclear as it hasn’t been experienced by anyone alive (unless they died and were resuscitated).  The line describes the moment as something that is known but still a mystery.

The second line is about the last breath and it wonders if there is a thought as it happens.

The third line then describes the moment of dying and acknowledges that that exact moment is unclear.

Lines four through six were more influenced by the form, as they were determined by lines one through three.  The meaning of the lines was not completely known as they were written, since how the lines would come together wasn’t focused on as the first three lines were written (although some idea about it was there).  This added some interest to the poem.

Line four starts with the moment before death when the last breath happens.  It talks about that moment being known, in the sense that it is expected at some point, yet it is still a mystery.

Line five talks about life being gone and that there are thoughts now about this.

The last line talks about the last instant before death and says it is unclear.

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