Poem with an explanation: ideas

walking in the heat
the dog can go no further
the train of thought stops

the train of thought stops
all the passengers get off
the shipwrecked ferry

the shipwrecked ferry
was broken up by the storm
she can’t leave the house

she can’t leave the house
and sits looking through the glass
dialysis time

dialysis time
is miles in the cold rain
home has run away

home has run away
as dark pesticide is sprayed
on the blue bird’s nest

on the blue bird’s nest
a lost chain glistens brightly
the half heart is lost

the half heart is lost
standing by the grave marker
shivering in heat

shivering in heat
lost in the one short hallway
things are so different

things are so different
standing in the empty room
the watch ticks loudly

 
The poem above is comprised of ten haiku, which are each one stanza of the poem.  Except for the last stanza, the last line of each stanza, is the first line of the next stanza.  The idea was to have a flow that still had a broken up feel to it.

A number of ideas were touched on in this poem.

The first stanza starts with someone walking their dog.  Because of the heat, the dog can’t walk anymore, and stops.  This literal imagery is then transitioned to metaphorical imagery by relating that idea to a train of thought stopping.

The next stanza starts with the metaphorical idea of the train of thought stopping and then transitions back to a literal idea.  The next two lines have a literal image.  In addition though, those lines also touch on the metaphorical idea that is expressed in the first line.

The third stanza starts with the same imagery of the shipwrecked ferry.  At first, the first two lines may sound literal.  The last line however, gives those lines a metaphorical meaning.  Those lines are describing a situation where a woman can’t leave her house.

In the fourth stanza, the reason the woman can’t leave her house is given: she is having dialysis done.  The mention of the dialysis was done in just two words which gives an impactful effect.

In the fifth stanza, the second two lines try to describe what dialysis might be like.  It is expressed as a situation of walking miles in cold rain where home has fled away.  The idea was to express the lengthy severity of the situation.

The sixth stanza takes the idea of home running away, and applies a new imagery to it.  In this case, a bird’s home is ruined with pesticide.

In the seventh stanza, the nest is related to, but then the imagery is changed.  This stanza isn’t about the nest, but about the object in it.

The eighth stanza starts off with the imagery of the seventh stanza of a physical object being lost, but then makes that a metaphor for sorrow over death.

The ninth stanza starts with a contrasting image of shivering in heat.  This type of contrasting image is continued in the next two lines.  The lines are describing someone with dementia.

The last stanza starts with the idea of things feeling different and then gives a reason for it – a person is alone in a room.

Because of the structure of the poem, many ideas could be put together that might not normally have a relationship to each other.

 

P.S.  The bookmark giveaway is still ongoing.  Please see the bookmark giveaway post for information.

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Bilingual Poem: Somewhere there are lies

Somewhere there are lies,
blocking the sound of truth,
claiming they are wise,
somewhere there are lies.
With force there are cries,
in a way that is uncouth,
somewhere there are lies,
blocking the sound of truth.

El alguna parte hay mentiras,
bloqueando el sonido de verdad,
afirmando ellos son sabio,
el alguna parte hay mentiras.
Con fuerza hay gritos,
en una manera es grosero,
el alguna parte hay mentiras,
bloqueando el sonido de verdad.

 

P.S.  The bookmark giveaway is still ongoing.  Please see the bookmark giveaway post for information.

 

Artwork to inspire poetry: man on ground

man on ground

Above is an artwork called man on ground.  The artwork was done at first with charcoal.  It was then scanned and computer altered.

This artwork can inspire poetry in a number of ways.

First, charcoal is generally poetic.  There is a poetic aspect to a drawing made (at least at first) with burnt wood.  Many symbolisms and metaphors can be drawn from that.

Second, a poet could obviously write about why the man was on the ground.  Is he sick?  Is he scared?  Did someone attack him?  Is he just on the ground because he wants to be?  There are many paths a poet could take with this.

Third, a poet could write about larger social issues.  This artwork might inspire a poet, for example, to write about something like homelessness.

 

At this point here are two blog notes:

First, a small note about the general contact form on M. Sakran’s blog:  The general contact form on the contact page consists of simply a textbox (this is different from the form for the Bookmark Giveaway).  Because of this, unless a contactor provides identifying information, such as name, email address, blog address, etc., M. Sakran will not have that information.

As a second note, the Bookmark Giveaway is currently happening.  In this giveaway, M. Sakran is intending to send some bookmarks to people FREE.  To learn more about the Bookmark Giveaway, read the Bookmark Giveaway Post.

 

Experimental Poetry Form: loss of words

Today’s experimental poetry form is called loss of words.  The idea here is to have a poem that flows slowly.  Its intention is to sound like someone trying to say some bad news but also trying not to say it.  There should be a sense of having a loss of words.

The form is based off of lines, line breaks and word counts.  There are ten lines and there is a space between each line.  The lines have the word counts as follows:

Line 1: one word
Line 2: three words
Line 3: two words
Line 4: one word
Line 5: two words
Line 6: one word
Line 7: one word
Line 8: one word
Line 9: one word
Line 10: two words

 

As can be seen, all of the lines are short, none having more than three words.  Also, most of the lines, only have one word.  The idea is for the poem to sound like someone is leading to saying something, but they aren’t saying it.  This is accomplished by the short lines and the line breaks.  Also, since the poem only has fifteen words, it limits the expression of the idea.  This goes in line with the idea of a poem that says something but doesn’t.  Rather than using the few words to express the idea succulently, the idea of the form, is to express the idea vaguely.

 

Here is an example of a poem written in the form:

 

So,

 

here’s the idea,

 

there’s something,

 

something,

 

that’s here,

 

but,

 

well,

 

something,

 

well,

 

that isn’t.

 

This poetry form has a structure (word counts, line breaks and number of lines), but it also has an intent with it.  It was designed for a certain type of poem.  Obviously though, a poet could apply the form to other types of situations.  It may have interesting affects.

 

P.S.  The bookmark giveaway is still ongoing.  Please see the bookmark giveaway post for information.

Poetry topic idea: bookmarks

Today’s poetry topic idea is bookmarks.  Obviously, it ties in with the bookmark giveaway.  See the bookmark giveaway post for more information about the giveaway.

Bookmarks can make an interesting poetry topic idea.  A poet could write about:

  • The book a person is using a bookmark in
  • Something symbolic about the design of the bookmark (for example, its color pattern)
  • The idea of one person using a bookmark to mark a page that later another person finds. This could be intentional by the person marking the page (for example, they are trying to communicate with someone) or it could be unintentional.
  • The page a person last marked before they died.
  • A person having difficulty reading and then marking the page they are on.

As examples of poems inspired by bookmarks, each of the poems on the backs of the bookmark giveaway bookmarks was inspired by the design on the corresponding front.  The fronts and backs of the bookmarks can be seen here: bookmark giveaway.  In case the poems are difficult to read from the image in the bookmark giveaway post, here they are again:

tiny raindrops fall
on wildflower petals
blue birds land on trees

bumble bees flutter
among the bright red roses
the date rings the bell

purple butterflies
pollinate the peach blossoms
a man reads a book

high in the fruit tree
peaches and leaves grow on stems
craftsmen work all day

manicured gardens
grow by wildflower fields
the visitors stop

seaweed floats with ease
on waves pushed by quiet wind
kites float in the sky

as the river flowed
they bounded across on stones
planets in the sky

green grass starts to grow
within a rock covered field
smiles on a train

Giveaway: Bookmarks

Today is the start of a giveaway on M. Sakran’s blog of and about poetry and poetry related things.  The giveaway is of eight bookmarks.  This is something nice M. Sakran would like to do for readers of this blog.

Each bookmark is approximately 2″ x 6″ and has a pattern of forty eight squares on the front.  On each bookmark, three colors make up the pattern.

Each bookmark is on paper with a weight of 199 g/m2.  The outline and squares were made on a computer and printed on a printer.  The colors were colored by hand with colored pencils.  On the front and back of each bookmark a sealer was applied.

On the back of each bookmark is a haiku (related to the front), a copyright notice, the web address for this blog and the web address for msakran.com (some of the bookmarks also have a partial outline on the back).  The text on the backs was printed using a computer.

Below are images of the fronts and backs of the bookmarks.

Bookmark fronts

Bookmark backs

Here is how the giveaway will work.  The first eight people (subject to the points below) who fill out the form at the end of this post with usable information will have a bookmark mailed to them.  The form asks for first name, last name, street address, secondary address (optional), city, state, zip code, and an acknowledgement that this entire post was read and understood.

Here are some points about the giveaway:

  • This giveaway is free.
  • There are only eight bookmarks available. Once eight bookmarks have been sent out or the deadline for the end of the giveaway occurs, the giveaway will end.
  • The bookmarks will only be sent in the continental United States. To be eligible to receive a bookmark, the address provided in the form below must be in the continental United States.
  • The information provided in the form below will only be used in relation to this giveaway.  M. Sakran will not sell the information or send junk mail.
  • The bookmarks will be available to the first eight people who submit complete and usable information using the form below. The form must be filled out completely (except for the optional secondary address line).  The information must be usable in the sense that M. Sakran can use it to mail a bookmark to the person who requests it.  This means that some people who fill out the form will potentially not receive a bookmark.
  • At most, only one bookmark is available per person.
  • The bookmarks will be sent out in a random order. When a bookmark is requested, one will be selected at random and mailed.
  • No individual notification will be sent that a bookmark is or is not being sent to an individual person. A person will know if they got a bookmark, if they get a bookmark.  A person will know that they did not get a bookmark, if after approximately two weeks from either the last bookmark being sent (which would be noted on this blog) or the deadline for the giveaway passes, that person has not received a bookmark.
  • The deadline for the giveaway is June 7, 2016 at 4:59 am GMT. This is the last possible time that information from the form below will be accepted.  The giveaway could end before that time if eight complete and usable requests are received before then.

Please fill out the form below today.

Bookmark Giveaway:

 

 

A photograph to inspire poetry: Birds in a nest

Birds in a nest

Above is a photograph of baby birds in a nest.  This is the same nest that had eggs in the photograph of Set Twenty Two on MSakran.com.  That set is currently on the home page.

This photograph can inspire poetry in a number of ways.  For example, a poet could write about:

  • birds in a nest
  • birds more generally
  • birth
  • life
  • something being hidden
  • vulnerability
  • youth
  • flight
  • dependency

Artwork to inspire poetry: Blue

Blue

This artwork is called Blue.  It was made with ten blue markers of different tones.  Lines were drawn in a repeating pattern until the paper was full.  After that, it was covered with a sealer.  This artwork is actually going to be used as a bookmark by M. Sakran.

As far as inspiration for poetry, this artwork can inspire a poet to write about:

  • Water (and various related things) – for example, a poet could write about waves in the ocean
  • Climbing (the artwork has a vertical ladder look to it) – for example, a poet might write about someone climbing something high into the sky
  • A testing strip of some kind (the artwork somewhat looks like one) – for example, a poet could write about something being tested in a lab and the significance of that
  • Marking a place in a book (this artwork is also a bookmark) – for example, a poet could write about when a person stops reading in a book and what caused them to stop

Experimental Poetry Form: Bird’s Nest

This experimental poetry form is based off of a bird’s nest:  it is tangled, but it fits together.  There is a photograph and an artwork of a bird’s nest as part of set twenty two on MSakran.com.

The tangled part of this form are the lines of different syllable counts.  There are:

  • 3 lines with 8 syllables each
  • 2 lines with 6 syllables each
  • 1 line with 5 syllables
  • 1 line with 4 syllables
  • 4 lines with 2 syllables each

The lines are in the order below:

8 syllable line
4 syllable line
2 syllable line
5 syllable line
2 syllable line
8 syllable line
6 syllable line
2 syllable line
6 syllable line
8 syllable line
2 syllable line

The lines have no meter.

The fitting together part of the form is that all the lines rhyme.  This means that 11 rhymes need to be thought of.  Because of this high number, after the first line, the last word of the line should be checked to see if there are ten words that rhyme with it.

Here is a poem written in the form:

Driving along an unknown way,
during mid-May,
one day,
past fields of cut hay,
with Ray,
   or was it instead that guy Jay?
   Someone who knows might say.
Say hey,
there was this small blue jay,
out where all that cut hay just lay,
said Fay.