Poem with an explanation: ideas

walking in the heat
the dog can go no further
the train of thought stops

the train of thought stops
all the passengers get off
the shipwrecked ferry

the shipwrecked ferry
was broken up by the storm
she can’t leave the house

she can’t leave the house
and sits looking through the glass
dialysis time

dialysis time
is miles in the cold rain
home has run away

home has run away
as dark pesticide is sprayed
on the blue bird’s nest

on the blue bird’s nest
a lost chain glistens brightly
the half heart is lost

the half heart is lost
standing by the grave marker
shivering in heat

shivering in heat
lost in the one short hallway
things are so different

things are so different
standing in the empty room
the watch ticks loudly

 
The poem above is comprised of ten haiku, which are each one stanza of the poem.  Except for the last stanza, the last line of each stanza, is the first line of the next stanza.  The idea was to have a flow that still had a broken up feel to it.

A number of ideas were touched on in this poem.

The first stanza starts with someone walking their dog.  Because of the heat, the dog can’t walk anymore, and stops.  This literal imagery is then transitioned to metaphorical imagery by relating that idea to a train of thought stopping.

The next stanza starts with the metaphorical idea of the train of thought stopping and then transitions back to a literal idea.  The next two lines have a literal image.  In addition though, those lines also touch on the metaphorical idea that is expressed in the first line.

The third stanza starts with the same imagery of the shipwrecked ferry.  At first, the first two lines may sound literal.  The last line however, gives those lines a metaphorical meaning.  Those lines are describing a situation where a woman can’t leave her house.

In the fourth stanza, the reason the woman can’t leave her house is given: she is having dialysis done.  The mention of the dialysis was done in just two words which gives an impactful effect.

In the fifth stanza, the second two lines try to describe what dialysis might be like.  It is expressed as a situation of walking miles in cold rain where home has fled away.  The idea was to express the lengthy severity of the situation.

The sixth stanza takes the idea of home running away, and applies a new imagery to it.  In this case, a bird’s home is ruined with pesticide.

In the seventh stanza, the nest is related to, but then the imagery is changed.  This stanza isn’t about the nest, but about the object in it.

The eighth stanza starts off with the imagery of the seventh stanza of a physical object being lost, but then makes that a metaphor for sorrow over death.

The ninth stanza starts with a contrasting image of shivering in heat.  This type of contrasting image is continued in the next two lines.  The lines are describing someone with dementia.

The last stanza starts with the idea of things feeling different and then gives a reason for it – a person is alone in a room.

Because of the structure of the poem, many ideas could be put together that might not normally have a relationship to each other.

 

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