Poem with an explanation: Don’t look, just listen, time will pass

Don’t look at the sand,
don’t look at the stone,
don’t look at the fire.

Just listen to bells,
just listen to flutes,
just listen to melodies.

Time will pass,
as eyes are closed.

 

This poem is about walking on a treadmill.  The idea of the poem is about not doing things and doing things to help the time go by faster.

The first stanza, has three don’ts.  It says not to look at the sand, the stone and the fire.  On the treadmill, there is a display.  It shows the time, distance and calories burned.  The idea is that if a person looks at these things as they try to reach some goal, that the time will feel slower.  Focusing on the numbers as they change has the psychological effect of making them seem to move slower.  The first stanza says not to look at them.  The sand, is symbolic of sand in an hour glass, which is representative of time.  Stone is symbolic of a road which represents distance.  Fire refers to burning which represents the calories burned.

The first stanza said what not to do.  The second stanza says what to do.  It is saying to listen to music as a form of distraction.  The first stanza was more symbolic than the second.

The last stanza describes the effect of the actions of the first two stanzas.  It is basically saying that by not looking at the display, and listening to music instead, that a person will be distracted, and their mind may wander.  When the person’s mind wanders, they may not see in a sense.  This can happen when a person daydreams.  The end effect is that the time exercising feels faster.

This poem is written as three stanzas and three sentences.  The first two stanzas are filled with repetition.  The first one repeats “Don’t look at the” and the second one repeats “Just listen to”.

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Poetry topic idea: the planet Mars

Today’s poetry topic idea is the planet Mars.  Writing poems about a planet provides a wide range of possibilities.

A poet could write about space travel, science fiction, colonization, isolation, desolation, danger and a variety of other issues in general.

Additionally, a poet could learn about the planet and write poems that focus on its atmosphere, composition, place in the solar system, etc.

Here is a poem about the planet Mars as an example:

The redness stretches out,
beyond the helmet’s mask,
so much like a desert,
the enormity doesn’t sink in.

In the CO2,
looking out,
seeing half of the Earth,
wondering at the blue,
feeling that it could be reached,
but knowing the impossibility.

Back in the hut,
finality is in the lights,
wondering when the day will come,
when this will unconsciously be called home.

In the whiteness,
where everything is monitored,
sitting in the silence,
and wondering what will be found here,
when this ends.

Announcement: Vintrig’s Kingdom by Freya Pickard

Freya Pickard has written a new novel: Vintrig’s Kingdom.

As readers of this blog will know, Freya wrote the foreword to M. Sakran’s collection of poems with explanations: Understanding: poems with explanations.  Readers should also know, that Freya runs Pure Haiku, where M. Sakran has had six poems published.

Vintrig’s Kingdom will officially be launched soon.  Readers can purchase it here, Vintrig’s Kingdom (UK) and here, Vintrig’s Kingdom (US).

Here’s what Vintrig’s Kingdom is about (this part is written by Freya and Copyright Freya Pickard 2016):

When Isu Magan, heir to Vintrig’s Throne, finds the journal of a vanished Scriber, her perceptions of history and the truth are challenged. A growing distrust of her loyal and powerful Counsellor initiates rebellious and frightening thoughts within her heart. Adding to this disruption of her ordered life, Isu finds herself attracted to the itinerant musician, Sama Conn. As the endless winter thaws, and a brief summer returns to the Castle, Isu longs to learn to dance, but fears her feelings towards Sama. Knowing she cannot love a mortal, the princess struggles with an increasing infatuation that could lose her the throne, and possibly her life.

Everyone in this tale is challenged and empowered by the arrival of Sama Conn and his travelling musicians. But Jya, the Counsellor, appears set against them and the change they bring to Vintrig’s Castle. The balance of power is threatened, and each person has to decide which party they will ally themselves with. Against this backdrop of scheming and fear, rises the question, again and again; what is the importance of Throne Peak?

Told from five viewpoints; Isu Magan, her maid, her steward, an elderly traveller and the anonymous Scriber, Vintrig’s Kingdom is a tale of romance, intrigue and dark history.

This tale is set within the mountainous, winter-bound walls of Vintrig’s Kingdom. Instead of the usual “quest”, the journey each person treads is a journey of the soul, into the innermost recesses of their fear to question the validity of the history they think they know …

 

In the book, each chapter is started with a haiku.  Here are two examples:

pink-edged clouds at dawn

give way to molten sunrise

glittering on frost

 

© Freya Pickard 2016

 

snowmelt refrozen

transparent scales of ice; the

lacework of winter

 

© Freya Pickard 2016

 

There are also other poems in the book that are songs.

As a note, the items in this post that are Copyright Freya Pickard 2016, were used with permission.

Blog readers can check out Freya’s new novel here: Vintrig’s Kingdom (UK), and here Vintrig’s Kingdom (US).

P.S. There will be no new blog posts on M. Sakran’s blog of and about poetry and poetry related things from November 24, 2016 – November 27, 2016 because of Thanksgiving and the weekend.  Happy Thanksgiving.

A photograph to inspire poetry: Acorn cap

Acorn cap

This is a photograph of an acorn cap.  It can inspire a number of poetry ideas.  Some ideas include:

  • Shelters.  This cap looks like a shelter.  A poet could write about a tiny creature, or in a more fantasy sense, a tiny person, and write about them using the acorn cap as a shelter.
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  • Small becoming large. This cap was from an acorn.  An acorn is small.  An oak tree can be large.  This idea of small becoming large can be used in a poem.
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  • Caps.  This is a cap to an acorn.  A poet could write a poem that uses a cap more generally.
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  • Inside and outside. This acorn cap has an inner texture and an outer texture.  This idea of the difference between the inside and outside can be used in a poem.

Experimental Poetry Form: eight two word lines

This experimental poetry form is called eight two word lines.  The name of the form describes it.  There are eight lines, each with two words.  There are no other restrictions.  Here is an example poem written in the form:

Fall day,
green grass,
nice breeze.

A stop,
for rest,
in sunshine.

Dappled light,
is peaceful.
 

P.S. Today’s post is the 650th post on M. Sakran’s blog of and about poetry and poetry related things.

Poem with an explanation: Two minutes

Two minutes.  Two minutes of watching.  Two minutes as the drips make their way down the clear path.  Two minutes as thoughts of side effects flow in the mind.  Two minutes as thoughts of disease flow in the mind.  Two minutes as years pass.

 

This poem is about a person receiving medication via IV.  The medication is started and the person watches as it starts at the bag, flows down the tube, and reaches their vein.  The process takes two minutes.

The first sentence states the time.  It is meant to encapsulate what is happening.  The beginning and end of the event is contained in it.  It says nothing else so as to emphasize the idea.

The second sentence describes the person watching the medication flow.  It’s meant to emphasize that the person spends the entire two minutes watching.  They stare, in a way, as the medication flows.

The third sentence describes the medication flowing.  The idea of drips is both literal and figurative.  It is meant to show the slowness and methodical quality of what is happening.  The path is clear in a literal sense, because the tube is clear, but also figuratively in that the person understands their situation.

In the fourth sentence, the person thinks of the side effects of the medication.  The thoughts about this flow in their mind similarly to how the medication flows in the tube.  The person is worried.

In the fifth sentence, the person thinks of the disease they have that requires the medication.  Again, the ideas about this flow in their mind like the medication.

In the last sentence, the two minutes of watching the medication flow are so significant in what they mean to the person, that those two minutes are like years.

In terms of form, this poem was written as prose.  Each sentence starts with (or only contains) Two minutes.  The third through the sixth sentences all start with Two minutes as.  The fourth and fifth sentences are almost the same.  One says side effects and the other says disease.

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Do you like poems with explanations?  Do you like to support writers whose work you enjoy?

M. Sakran has a self-published book of poems with explanations. It is called Understanding: poems with explanations and is available for purchase as an eBook for an available price of $0.99. If you like poems with explanations and like to support writers whose work you enjoy, then consider purchasing a copy today.