Poetry topic idea: the second day

Today’s poetry topic idea is “the second day”.  Often in life, we focus on the first day of something or the last day of something.  What about the second day though?  What happens after the initial overwhelming emotion of the first day, but before things become routine?  What happens on the second day?  Think about things like, the second day of school or a job or marriage.  There are many places where this idea can be applied and a poem could be written.

Here is a poem inspired by the second day of Lent:

Sure,
the food is on the mind,
with feeling in the body,
there was a moment,
of thinking of the time,
and yet,
it’s true,
with all the focus,
on this thing that overwhelms,
it’s so easy to care about what comes in,
and not care about what comes out.
As is said is true,
what comes in is important,
but what comes out is more so.
Lent of the mouth,
in both ways,
should be there.

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Experimental Poetry Form: alternating four and five letter words

Today’s experimental poetry form has the criteria of alternating four and five letter words.  Other than this, the form has no criteria.  One way to use the form, as shown below, would be to apply it to another form.  In this case, the form was applied to the haiku form.

 

Some paths flow about,
seen among cool light blue stars,
eyes stare over hills

 

The form is not difficult to use, however some thought must be given to word choice, both to find words that match the correct letter count, and to find words that make sense in order.  Applying the form to another form, does increase the difficulty some.

Poem with an explanation: and silence lay

On the broken mountain,
with the ocean,
and all those dead,
where the waves cease,
and the plague hides,
broken beams,
piles of iron,
flows of iron,
empty windows,
and silence lay.

 

This poem is about a person who was beaten and left in an alley at night.  The negativity of the scene pervades the imagery in the poem.  Here is a line by line explanation:

On the broken mountain – The person is lying on the stone ground.  The stones, at some stage, were broken off mountains.

with the ocean – Where the person is, the ground is wet with water.  This has run off from different places.  This water, at some stage, came from the ocean.

and all those dead – Along with the water, there is oil on the ground.  This too has run off from different places.  This oil is made of dead plants and animals.

where the waves cease – The person is in darkness as it is night and they are in an alley.  Light can be described as waves and particles.  The idea that there is no light there (or rather very little) is described as the waves ceasing.  This imagery ties back to the imagery of the ocean from before.

and the plague hides – In the alley, there are rats hiding.  Rats, at one point and in some places, carried plague.

broken beams – This line marks a transition in the poem.  The lines before this described the alley.  This marks the start of describing the person.  The person has broken ribs after being beaten.  The person is like a toppled building.  The toppled building would have broken steel beams.  This is used metaphorically to describe the person’s ribs.

piles of iron – The person is bruised.  Bruises, as far as M. Sakran understands, are where blood vessels have been broken.  Blood has iron in it.  The bruises are described as piles of iron.

flows of iron – In addition to having bruises, the person is bleeding.  The person’s flowing blood is described as flows of iron.

empty windows – The person is unconscious.  Their eyes could be described as windows.  Because of their unconsciousness, the windows are described as being empty.

and silence lay – The person is silent.

The poem combines negative nature imagery with negative industrial imagery to describe the scene.

Some interesting points about the poem, relate to some things that are left out.  For example, the gender of the person in the poem is never mentioned.  Readers may have imagined one gender or the other.  Second, the age of the person is not said.  Again, readers may have had a picture of the age of the person in their mind.  Third and fourth, the race and social class of the person are not mentioned.

In another interesting point, the reason for what happened is not said.  The person is described as being beaten and the scene is describe as being negative.  Readers may have taken this to mean the person was a victim (and in actuality, that was the intent).  However, the status of the person in relation to what happened is never actually said.  It could have been, that the person was the bad one in the poem, and that they attacked someone else, who then fought back, causing the result in the poem.  Or, the person could have been on equal moral standing with someone else.  Maybe this was the result of a fight, as opposed to an attack.  These ideas are never explicitly addressed in the poem or the explanation that preceded this part.

P.S.  Did you know that M. Sakran has an eBook of poems with explanations?  It is true.  It is called Understanding: poems with explanations.  If you liked this poem with explanation, you might consider purchasing a copy of the book.

Poetry topic idea: The Finch

Today’s poetry topic idea is The FinchThe Finch is a science fiction novel about two friends and their flying ship written by M. Sakran.  You can read the entire novel from www.msakran.com/the-finch.html.  One chapter was posted each week and the last chapter was posted yesterday.

A novel can be a very broad start for writing poetry.  There are so many aspects and details in a novel that numerous poems could be written.  The Finch is about friendship, flying ships and adventure.  Lots of ideas can come from it.

Here are some poems inspired by the novel:

Capture Georgia?
Ha!
Get ready for a bad day.

Captinal Larceny?
That’s not good.
Wait till Hugo comes.

The Confederation,
would like you to fill out this form,
… and these twelve others.

Transport 7?!
What kind of name is that?
Now, Yellow Jacket – there’s a cool name.

So the ship is dented,
and probably can’t fly –
at least it’s right-side up.

Considerations: The first consideration: The end

As readers know, the first consideration time period ended this past Saturday.  The idea of the time period, was that readers could each send a poem to M. Sakran for consideration, and if M. Sakran liked one, and other things were alright, then the poem would have been published on this blog.

Unfortunately, no one sent in a poem.

 

M. Sakran is a little saddened by this. The main idea of accepting poems for consideration was to do something for readers. The idea was to give them an opportunity to have something published and to have more engagement with the blog than just reading things.

Obviously, something about the idea didn’t appeal to readers.  M. Sakran apologizes for this.  The whole idea was to do something readers would like, and that wasn’t done.

There are probably lots of different reasons that readers didn’t send poems in.  Maybe the instructions were too long.  Maybe it seemed too complicated.  Maybe readers didn’t like the idea of writing poems based off of things in blog posts.  Maybe getting published on this blog just wasn’t appealing.  It could have been lots of things.  M. Sakran apologizes for whatever it was.

Whatever it was about the idea that didn’t appeal to readers, hopefully the rest of the blog was and is still enjoyed.

Since this idea obviously was not something readers liked, at least for the foreseeable future it won’t be done again.  This may change at some point if things can be improved.  For now, the Considerations page has been removed.

In closing, M. Sakran would like to thank all readers generally for reading this blog as well as thank any who at least considered the idea of sending a poem in.  Hopefully if this is ever done again, things will be better.

Considerations: The first consideration: Almost the end

It is almost the end of the first considerations time period.  Tomorrow is the last day to send M. Sakran a poem for consideration for this time period.  One of the poems sent in might be published on this blog.  If you don’t know what this is about, then see the Considerations page for information.  Don’t miss this opportunity.

Although there is more detail on the Considerations page, the basic idea is very simple:

  1. Readers find an Artwork, Photograph, Poetry topic idea or Experimental poetry form from this blog that they like.
  2.  

  3. They write a poem using that post.
  4.  

  5. They send the poem to M. Sakran (there’s a form to use on the Considerations page).
  6.  

It’s really very easy.

The idea of the considerations is provide something for readers of this blog.  If you read this blog, you might write poetry.  If you write poetry, you might like the idea of sending it to someone and seeing if it gets published.  If you like the idea of having the opportunity to be published, then don’t miss this opportunity.  Send a poem in today.

Poem: There’s a feeling

There’s a feeling,
waking up,
in the middle of the night,
and being filled with terror,
at something so harsh,
and then realizing,
that it was a dream,
and feeling that calm,
and relief,
and peace.

 

There’s also a feeling,
waking up,
in the middle of the night,
and being filled with terror,
at something so harsh,
and then realizing,
that it isn’t a dream,
and feeling that chaos,
and dread,
and fear.