Poem with an explanation: that eyes will see

Beside the straw,
upon the dusty ground,
the herbs lie,
and the rock that shines,
away the rocks,
are pushed away,
and as eyes close,
there is hope,
that hawks will see,
and that eyes will see.

This poem is about a person experiencing a medical condition that may have a sudden effect.  Think of a person with, for example, blood sugar problems, and they are concerned of a sudden change.

The person is about to go to sleep on their bed (the straw).  In their concern, they place medicine beside them on the floor (upon the dusty ground, the herbs lie).  They also have a phone on the floor (and the rock that shines – think of someone on a mountain shining a mirror so they can be seen).

The person leaves the door of their bedroom unlocked (away the rocks, are pushed away).  And as the person sleeps (and as eyes close), they hope that if something happens that others who live with them will come by (that hawks will see) and that they themselves will be alright and wake up in the morning (and that eyes will see).

The imagery used in the poem was that of a lone person in a rocky desert place, like might be seen in a western movie.  That was used to convey the idea of the person with the medical condition.

In some ways this is a poem about vulnerability.  The person realizes they may need help both from medicine and from others and they take steps for both of these.

There is some form to the poem, although it was not intentional.  The lines have a word count pattern of 3,4,3,5,3,3,4,3,4,5.  As can be seen all of the lines have a word count of 3, 4 or 5 lines.  Additionally, the poem is 10 lines long, which might be seen as a good number of lines for a form.

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