Poem with an explanation: Two women

sitting on the chair,
in the silence of the room,
back to the story

sitting on the chair,
in the music of the room,
back to the story

 

This poem contrasts the experiences of two women.  Before the poem begins, both women are in similar circumstances.  Both women are invited to the same party.  Both women are introverts and don’t do well in social situations.  They have a hard time talking to strangers, they are not knowledgeable of popular culture, and they don’t communicate well in large groups.

Under these circumstances, the first woman (the one in the first stanza) decides not to go to the party.  She feels that if she goes, she won’t be able to talk to others or interact with a large group, and that she will feel uncomfortable or lonely.

The second woman (the one in the second stanza) decides to go to the party.  She feels lonely at home and thinks that she might meet people and make friends at the party.  She believes that she will feel part of a group if she goes and that she will feel less lonely going than if she stayed at home.

In the poem, it turns out that the first woman made the better decision.

When the poem starts, it is an hour into the party.  The first woman, as described in the first stanza, is sitting at home in a chair.  She is reading a novel.  There is a point where she realizes she is alone, when she notices the silence in the room.  For a moment this makes her feel lonely, but then she escapes into the story of her novel.

The second woman, as described in the second stanza, is sitting alone in a chair at the party.  She is a wallflower.  Although she had wanted to interact with others, her shyness and lack of social skills prevents her.  Also, no one at the party initiates interaction with her.

The second woman is sitting by herself, and she notices the music of the room.  There is talking and dancing and music and a party going on around her.  She isn’t part of it though, and sitting there makes her feel awkward.  She feels self-conscious and thinks that people are noticing her by herself.  She doesn’t know where to look or what to do so that she doesn’t look like she is doing nothing.  As a means of escape, she daydreams.  When she daydreams, she has moments where she feels like she is no longer in the room, and it provides her comfort.

In the poem, the first woman is able to be more comfortable and feel less lonely, ironically, because she is alone.  Unlike the second woman, who has her aloneness accentuated by people around her who seem to be a group she is not part of, the first woman is better able to ignore the fact that she is alone because there is no one there to remind her of it.

In terms of form, this poem is made up of two poems.  Each stanza is a 5/7/5 haiku.

Both stanzas are almost identical.  There is only one word of difference between the two.  The first stanza has “silence” and the second has “music”.  In a twist from how the poem might at first be read, the silence of the first stanza turns out to be less lonely causing than the music of the second.

 

P. S.  M. Sakran was wondering if anyone would be interested in participating in a poem with an explanation collaboration. The basic idea would be that a person would write a poem, and M. Sakran would write an explanation of it.  The details would have to be worked out, but it might be something that could be interesting.  If anyone is interested in this idea, please contact M. Sakran using the form on the Contact Page.  Thank you.

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Bilingual Poem: Hello to The Philippines

Hello to The Philippines

 

Shaped by the Earth,
shaped by the sea,
shaped by the past

a mixture of places,
a mixture of peoples,
a mixture of pasts

influence from without,
influence from within

stand atop the mountain,
look out at all you see

working separately,
yet all together,
seek what could be,
that lies ahead

hello to The Philippines

 

 

Hullo a las Islas Filipinas

 

determinarion por la Tierra,
determinarion por el mar,
determinarion por el pasado

una mezcla de lugares,
una mezcla de gentes,
una mezcla de pasados

influencia de sin,
influencia de dentro de

están de pie en la cumber de la montaña,
miran fuera en todos Ustedes ven

trabajaron por separado,
todavía todos juntos,
buscan lo que poder está,
ese está antes

hullo a las Islas Filipinas

Poetry topic idea: hunger

Today’s poetry topic idea is hunger.  Here are some ways to use it in poetry:

  • A poet could write about a momentary hunger for food. Think of an experience where a person misses a meal.  Think of the sensation of hunger they might feel.  This could be used in poetry.
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  • As an alternative, a poet could write about a sustained hunger for food. Think of a person living in poverty, who might only get one meal a day, or every other day.
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  • In another idea, a person could write about someone who is hungry in association with a purpose. For example, think of someone on a hunger strike.
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  • A person might also write about hunger associated with an eating disorder.
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  • Hunger could also be used metaphorically in poetry. A person could hunger for many things other than food.  A poet could write about those.

 

Here is a humorous example poem using hunger:

M. Sakran is hungry,
  (oh … remember the Scotch egg from yesterday)
but will not have breakfast,
until this post is done.

Oh why isn’t the post done yet?!

Artwork to inspire poetry: Seeded half of a Roma tomato

Seeded half of a Roma tomato

This artwork is of a seeded half of a Roma tomato.  It was done in colored pencil and then scanned.  There was a little bit of computer alteration to correct a spot.

This artwork can inspire poetry.  Here are some ideas:

  • A poet might think of food and thinking of using the tomato in recipes or stuffing it. A poet could write about that.
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  • A poet might write about infertility.
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  • A poet might see this tomato as being prepared and might write about preparation.
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  • A poet might think the seeded tomato reminds them of a boat and write about boats.

A photograph to inspire poetry: a red and green plant

Red and Green Plant

This is a photograph of a red and green plant.  It can inspire poetry.  Some ideas include:

  • The plant has a shiny almost waxy look to it, as if it were artificial. It might be more typical for a poem to be written where something fake is attempting to seem real.  In this case, the opposite idea could be applied: something real, seeming to be fake.  This notion could be applied to situations in life that could be used in poems.  For example, a poet could think of a social situation in a social subculture, where something real isn’t valued as much as something artificial.  They could imagine a person trying portray something that is real as being artificial, for the purpose of fitting in with the group.
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  • Obviously being red and green, this plant might inspire Christmas poetry.
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  • The plant is shiny and reflecting light. This idea of reflection could be used in poetry.
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  • The plant is curling around the edges. A poet might see this and decide to write about curly hair.

A Milestone: One Year Anniversary of Understanding: poems with explanations

Understanding: poems with explanations by M. Sakran

Today is the one year anniversary of the self-publication of Understanding: poems with explanations.  It is a happy day.

Understanding: poems with explanations by M. Sakran, is a self-published collection of twenty original poems, with explanations of each of them.  The main purpose of the book is to help readers expand their understanding of poetry through the explanations.

The poems in the book cover a variety of topics such as poverty, homelessness, pain, neglect, crime and illness.

The explanations look at the overall meanings of the poems, the meanings of individual parts of the poems, and form in the poems.

Understanding: poems with explanations is currently available for purchase as an eBook here: Understanding: poems with explanations.  It is available for $0.99 (plus tax where applicable).

Poems with explanations has been a regular category on this blog.  You can read the ones that are on it by clicking here: poems with explanations on the blog.  If you like what you read and you like the idea of reading an explanation of a poem, then please consider purchasing a copy of the eBook.

M. Sakran would like to take this opportunity to thank everyone who has already purchased a copy of the eBook this past year. Each purchase brought a little bit of joy to M. Sakran.  Thank you.  Hopefully you all liked the eBook and found it informative and enlightening and hopefully it helped you learn more about poetry.

If you have purchased a copy of Understanding: poems with explanations please tell your friends about it.  Let them know what you thought and feel free to link here.  Also, if you like, you can use the form on the contact page to let M. Sakran know what you thought.

Again, today is a happy day.  Thank you to those who will buy a copy of the eBook today and thank you again to those who already have.

Poem with an explanation: the deaths of silence and regret

Numbers in a row,
a transposition,
a travel down the lane,
and the mountain appears.

The fire stops burning,
a descent,
the drawbridge lowers,
and the rocks are piled.

From within the cave,
the eyes open,
the sound of bells,
awakens.

Traveling on,
looking out,
seeing the sight,
and the meter rises.

Still by the bridge,
the rocks move on,
unaware,
of the storm.

Something is taken,
and steps run,
it all flashes,
and then a stop.

Roaring and roaring,
the lion yells,
its teeth are shown,
and an order given.

Still by the bridge,
the rocks move on,
unaware,
of the storm.

The roar again,
the clocks are off,
the lion bites,
and silence falls.

Silence sees,
and asks,
the lion roars,
and speaks.

Silence tries,
but can’t,
silence tries,
but dies.

The lion heaves,
and pants,
its teeth glare,
as it calls out.

Seasons pass.

Regret stands still,
hearing the words,
asking the questions,
then led away.

 

This poem tells a story.  It is the story of two people who die.

In the poem, a deaf person is driving to a house to pick up items that were left outside.  He has arranged with someone to get somethings.  He is going to pick up furniture and other items.

In the first stanza, he is driving along.  He has an address (Numbers in a row).  There is a mistake though, and two of the numbers were mixed up (a transposition).  Because of this, he goes to the wrong house.  He drives down a one lane road (a travel down the lane) and when he sees a house with items outside (and the mountain appears) that matches the address he has, he thinks he has the right place.

He stops his truck (The fire stops burning), gets out (a descent), opens the back (the drawbridge lowers), and starts loading the truck (and the rocks are piled).

Inside the house (From within the cave), the owner of the house wakes up (the eyes open and awakens) when he hears the noise (the sound of bells).

The man inside the house, goes to the window (Traveling on), looks outside (looking out), sees the other man loading things in a truck (seeing the sight) (the things were outside because the man in the house was doing some work on his house.  He needed the items out of the house so he could change his floors.), and he gets very angry (and the meter rises).

The deaf man is still by his truck (Still by the bridge) loading items (the rocks move on).  He is unaware (unaware) that the man inside is angry (of the storm).

The man inside gets a gun (Something is taken), he runs outside (and steps run), everything is a blur (it all flashes) and he stops some feet away from the man loading the truck (and then a stop).

The man with the gun yells for the other man to stop loading the truck (Roaring and roaring, the lion yells), he points his gun (its teeth are shown), and he tells the other man to stop or he’ll shoot (and an order given).

The deaf man doesn’t see the man with the gun because the man with the gun is behind him and to one side, and he doesn’t hear him because he is deaf.  He keeps on loading the truck (Still by the bridge, the rocks move on, unaware, of the storm).

The man with the gun yells again (The roar again).  He doesn’t pause or stop afterward (the clocks are off), but rather, in his anger, fires his gun (the lion bites).  The bullet hits the deaf man and he falls (and silence falls).

The deaf man rolls over and looks up at the man with the gun (Silence sees).  With his eyes he asks “Why?”, as in why was he shot (and asks).  The man with the gun yells some more (the lion roars) and he tells the man on the ground that he is a thief and that he should have stopped when he was told (and speaks).

The deaf man, tries to understand what happened (Silence tries), but can’t (but can’t).  He tries to stay alive (silence tries), but he dies (but dies).

The man with the gun is spent and out of breath (The lion heaves and pants), he holds his gun tightly (its teeth glare) and he calls out to someone else in the house to call the police (as it calls out).

Time passes (Seasons pass).  The police come, they investigate and they arrest the man who shot.  Time passes and the man goes on trial.

At the trial, the man who shot stands up (Regret stands still).  The jury says he is guilty of murder and the judge sentences him to death (hearing the words).  He asks with regretful confusion how was he to know it was a mistake and the man was deaf (asking the questions) and then they lead him away (then led away).

 

This poem examines how a mistake, a misunderstanding, an overreaction and a lack of communication lead to the death of two people.

 

P. S. Tomorrow is the one year anniversary of the self-publication of M. Sakran’s eBook Understanding: poems with explanations. If you like poems with explanations, then consider purchasing a copy of the eBook.

Experimental Poetry Form: ironing

Today’s experimental poetry form is called ironing.  It has alternating “wrinkled” and “ironed” lines.

The wrinkled lines are free verse.  The only restriction is that the lines are self-contained.  Each line should make sense in some way without having to read part of the next line.

The ironed lines are blank verse.  They are written in iambic pentameter.  These lines too should be self-contained.

The poem is six lines long.  The pattern is wrinkled, ironed, wrinkled, ironed, wrinkled, ironed.

None of the lines should rhyme in any intentional way and there are no other form elements.