Poetry topic idea: addiction

Today’s poetry topic idea is addiction.  Although drugs might be the most likely thing that a person may think one could be addicted to, people can also be addicted to other things, such as food.

In writing about addiction, a poet can approach it in different ways.  A poet might write about:

  • An addiction they have.
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  • An addiction someone they know has.
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  • An addiction of a fictional person.
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  • The cause of an addiction.
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  • The cost of an addiction.
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  • Trying to overcome an addiction.
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  • Different states experienced while being addicted.
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  • Things that are addictive.
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  • Difference experiences of someone addicted.
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  • A person realizing that they are addicted.
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  • How people relate to someone with an addiction.

 

Here is an example poem relating to a food addiction:

Healthy,
healthy,
just had an apple,
just walked a mile,
healthy,
healthy,
no need for cake,
no need for cake,
cake isn’t healthy,
it’s there in the refrigerator,
cake isn’t healthy,
it’s chocolate,
no,
no,
no need for cake,
but it’s just cake,
it’s just cake,
just had an apple,
just walked a mile,
there’s the cake,
there’s the plate,
just had an apple,
just walked a mile,
why feel deprived?
why feel bad?
cake has eggs,
eggs are good,
cake has grain,
grain is good,
it’s just cake,
cake isn’t bad,
a small slice,
there’s other ways to be healthy,
it’s not a big deal,
no need to worry,
other people eat cake,
dieting is silly

why was the cake eaten?
it wasn’t healthy,
why was the cake eaten?
why the rationalization?
why the justification?
it all feels so heavy,
why the rationalization?
it didn’t taste that good,
why the justification?
it wasn’t healthy,
it wasn’t needed,
why the justification?
why the rationalization?
why?
not next time,
not next time

Bilingual Poem: Doggie addiction

The poodle,
should have known better,
when the bulldog,
on the corner,
said the first dog biscuit,
was free.

 

El perro de lanas,
debe haber sabía major,
cuándo el dogo,
en la esquina,
dijo el primer magdalena de perro,
estuvo gratis.

 

P.S.  Did you know that readers can currently send M. Sakran poems for consideration?  It’s true.  You can send a poem to M. Sakran, and it might get published on this blog.  If you’d like to learn more about this, read the 1000th day post.

Post Series: Poems with Explanations: Introduction and Poem one (Three days)

As mentioned yesterday, M. Sakran has self-published a book of poems with explanations called Understanding: poems with explanations.  It is currently available as an eBook for an available price of $0.99.  Learn more about the book in yesterday’s post.  Buy your copy today!

To help celebrate this self-publication, there is going to be, starting today, a post series of poems with explanations here on the blog.  The series will consist of twenty posts (counting this one).  Each post will have a poem with an explanation.

As a point of clarity, these poems with explanations are NOT the same ones as in Understanding: poems with explanations.  These poems with explanations are different from the ones in the book.

Should anything of note happen during the series, it will be mentioned in a P.S. to a post.  Also, generally, there should be a post in the series each weekday, until the series is done.  If for some reason, there will be a weekday without a post, that will be mentioned in the post on the weekday before, at the latest.

Here is the first poem and explanation:

Three days

Walking around,
with that look,
and a moment,
of possibilities,

and then,
with a glance,
  a glance so regretted,
seen on the wall,
the rows.

A flood,
a feeling,
a speechless wonder,
and there standing,
wanting to run,
away.

But obligation,
but social situation,
but something about,
inner strength,

sitting down,
  not like a moment before,
and feeling it all,
and wondering,
what to do.

 

In this poem, a person is asked to house sit for some friends.  The poem starts, with the person in the house, right after the friends have left.  The person is going to be house sitting for three days.  That is the underlying beginning premise of the poem.  Within in this though, there is a poem about addiction.

The person in the poem is an alcoholic.  They are sober, and have been for a few months.  Their addiction was not on their mind when they agreed to house sit.  The friends, did not know of the situation.  The problem in the poem occurs, when as the person walks around the house, they see a wine bar, that they did not know was there.  The person then experiences a struggle.

In the first stanza, the person is in the house right after the friends have left.  They start by Walking around, and they have a certain stereotypical look of wonderment (with that look) as they take in the house, which is much better than the one they live in.  As they are there, they think of all they might do during this three day, what feels like, vacation (and a moment, of possibilities).

As the person is having this positive moment, in the second stanza, something changes (and then).  The person happens to move their eyes (with a glance), and in an instant, they regret it (a glance so regretted).  The person happened to look (seen on the wall) and see wine bottles on the wall (the rows).

When this happens, as expressed in the third stanza, the person is overwhelmed (A flood, a feeling, a speechless wonder).  In part, they have battled their addiction, and started to be sober, by avoiding alcohol.  In that instant, they feel confined (and there standing) and they want to run away and get away from this (wanting to run, away).  They are worried they will give in to their addiction.

In their mind, but not in their body, they almost move toward the front door to flee.  This is stopped though by their mind.  They feel they can’t leave.  They feel an obligation to their friends (But obligation) and they wonder how it would look to tell them that they are an alcoholic (which their friends do not know) and that they cannot handle being in the house.  They feel this would be socially awkward (but social situation).  In addition to these feelings, they also have a sense that they should be able to face this situation.  They feel like they should be able to resist the bottles on the wall (but something about, inner strength).

In the last stanza, the person sits down on a couch (sitting down), and there is a quick moment where they realize how everything has changed from just a moment before (not like a moment before).  They feel very overwhelmed (and feeling it all) and they wonder what they are going to do (and wondering, what to do).

This poem is essentially about a person facing an unexpected temptation in an addiction.  The poem is called Three days, because of the time in the house, but also because of the idea that that is how long the person will be facing this particular trial.

In terms of form, this poem is five stanzas long.  Stanzas one and two were written as one sentence, as were stanzas four and five.

The poem was written as a free verse poem, with the two indentions (one in the second stanza and one in the fifth) meant to set those two moments apart.

Although the poem is free verse, there are some interesting, although some in some sense unintentional, form elements.

Stanza one, for example, has a word count per line of 2, 3, 3, 2.  This seems like a pattern and is coincidently, the same word count pattern found in stanza four.

In the fourth stanza, there was the intentional form element of having the pairing of obligation and situation in lines one and two.  There was an idea of repeating a sound.  Additionally, the two but‘s in lines two and three also made a pairing.

As mentioned, the two indentions of stanzas two and five, were intentional and were meant to set those moments apart.

Poem with an explanation: How long did the falling take?

How long did the falling take?
Down a hill?
From a cliff?
How long did the falling take?

 

This poem utilizes the experimental poetry form Eighteen Words.  As can be seen, the poem has eighteen words.  Additional form elements particular to this use of the form are:

  • The first and last lines repeat.
  • All lines are questions.
  • The first and last lines each have six words. That is twice the number of words as each of the middle two lines.

This poem is about trying to understand something.  In the poem, one person is asking these questions of another.  The person asking the questions wants to understand what something was like.  The something in the poem is some sort of low state in someone’s life.  This low state could be many things.  It could for example be homelessness or addiction.  The person asking the questions is trying to understand how this state was reached.  Did it happen slowly, like falling down a hill, or did it happen quickly, like falling from a cliff?  The person asking the questions is not intending to be inquisitive or rude, they just want some sense of understanding.