Experimental Poetry Form: cutting a deck of cards

This experimental poetry form is based off of the idea of cutting a deck of cards.  The base of the poem is five lines long.  Each line is different.  The base could be represented as:

A
B
C
D
E

After the base is written, the first two lines are moved as a set to the end of the poem and the poem is written out again.  It could be represented as:

C
D
E
A
B

This movement of lines is then repeated and the poem is written again as:

E
A
B
C
D

The movement is then repeated one last time as:

B
C
D
E
A

 

All of the pieces should be written as one poem, with each piece serving as a stanza, such as:

A
B
C
D
E

C
D
E
A
B

E
A
B
C
D

B
C
D
E
A

 

The main difficulty in the poem is finding lines that make sense in all the rearranged orders.  To help with that, punctuation, capitalization and indention can change from stanza to stanza.

Rearranging the lines as shown is not the same as mixing the lines up.  All that is happening in each set is that some part of poem is moved from the beginning to the end.  In each of the sets, there is one movement that would put the poem back in order.  For example, in the set EABCD, if the E line was moved to the end, the poem would be back in order.  This idea is part of the poetry form.  The idea is to examine moving lines instead of mixing up lines.

The main idea of the poetry form is to see how the expression changes when the lines are rearranged.  The tone of the poem can change depending on line order, and this change is part of the idea.

Here is an example poem written in the form:

The heat beat down,
upon the worn shape,
as images of collapsing filled the mind,
cars drove by,
and one took pity.

As images of collapsing filled the mind,
cars drove by,
and one took pity –
  the heat beat down,
  upon the worn shape.

And one took pity –
  the heat beat down,
  upon the worn shape,
  as images of collapsing filled the mind,
  cars drove by.

Upon the worn shape,
  as images of collapsing filled the mind,
  cars drove by,
  and one took pity,
the heat beat down.

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Poem Series Voting Result and First Poem

Unfortunately, no votes were cast for the subject for this week’s poem series.  In light of this, the subject was chosen using a random method, as mentioned in the first post to mention the voting.

The five possible subjects were: Dogs, Poems using the Tanka form, Eyes, Yesterday, and Cure.

To select the subject for the poem series, a deck of cards was used.  The deck was shuffled, and the first five cards were dealt out, one for each of the subjects.  The subjects were assigned the values of the cards.  The cards were:

7 of hearts – Dogs
Queen of diamonds – Poems using the Tanka form
Queen of clubs – Eyes
2 of hearts – Yesterday
Queen of clubs – Cure

Since there was a three way tie between Poems using the Tanka form, Eyes, and Cure (a Queen has a value of 12), the process was repeated for those three subjects.  The cards dealt were:

5 of clubs – Poems using the Tanka form
3 of diamonds – Eyes
Ace of diamonds – Cure

Counting an ace as a one, the selected subject for this week’s poem series was Poems using the Tanka form.  As mentioned before, these poems will use the Tanka form.  They will not be about poems using the Tanka form.

The first poem in the series is below:

Five trees in a row,
a bird flew above them all,
where would the bird land,
since three trees were the same height,
and one had to be chosen?