Poem: Halloween twist

the dog,
decided,
to dress its person up,
for Halloween

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Poem with an explanation: You who call in the night

You who call in the night,
what do you need?

Is it

  sustenance?
  a resolution?
  a warning of dread?
  an insignificance?
  just a presence?

You who call in the night,
what do you need?

 

This poem has two levels, the literal and the metaphorical.

On the literal level, the poem is about a simple idea: a dog outside a house barking with a sound to get attention.  The dog is the one who calls in the night, and the person in the house asks what the dog needs.

The person in the house believes the dog is barking so that:

  the person will bring the dog food
  the person will solve a problem for the dog (ex. something is caught on the dog’s collar)
  the person will be aware of something bad (ex. a storm, an animal, an intruder)
  the person will just listen, and there is nothing the dog needs,
  or the person will come outside and spend time with the dog.

When the dog barks, the person questions what the dog needs.  After the list of things, the person questions the dog again.  It is interesting, that at the end of the poem, the person does not actually see what the dog wants, nor does anything for the dog (at least it isn’t stated that they do).

On a metaphorical level, the poem could be seen as about a group in humanity calling out for help.  It could be refugees or the poor of some area or people affected by a war.  Although not equating the two, the poem uses the literal idea of a dog barking for something, to express the idea of the group calling out for help.

The group calls out in the night (from some place of darkness) and others in humanity who hear, question what they want.

As with the dog, they think the group is crying out for:

  aid (sustenance)
  a solving of what is causing their problem (a resolution)
  to warn others that what is harming them might harm others (a warning of dread)
  for no reason (from the perspective of the ones hearing – they may not realize the significance of the plight of the group and think their call is insignificant) (an insignificance)
  for intervention (just a presence).

Again, as with the dog, the ones who hear question the callers, but nothing is said if they help them or not.

The idea of the poem was to take something simple (a dog barking) and apply it to something significant (the plight of some group in humanity).

Poem with an explanation: Sitting down

Sitting down,
on the tomb like stone,
all is blurry,
in the singularity,
after a moment,
the summer solstice,
appearing in March,
a tornado,
from the hurricane,
to those in the stands,
it either makes sense,
or is foolishness,
but there,
on the tomb like stone,
all is blurry,
in the singularity.

Above is a poem.  Below is its explanation.  Before you read the explanation though, take a moment, and think about what you think the poem means.  Then, as you read the explanation, you can see how your interpretation of the poem compares with the intended meaning of the poem.

Did you think it meant something different?

Did you think it meant the same thing?

Were you surprised?

Was it what you expected?

If you find this exercise to be insightful in some way, the idea of comparing what you thought a poem meant compared to what the poet intended it to mean, you might consider writing a post for your blog about it.  You can link to this post if you want.  Please let M. Sakran know if you do, by using the Contact page.  Maybe you found some insight about how you read poems, or about the idea of intended meaning vs. interpreted meaning, or something else, that you thought might be good to share with your readers.  If so, consider sharing it with your readers.

If you like poems with explanations in general, you might consider purchasing a copy of M. Sakran’s self-published eBook, Understanding: poems with explanations, which contains twenty poems and explanations of those poems.

Here is the explanation of the poem:

This is a poem about a person whose pet has died in front of them.  The pet died of some illness.

The poem starts after the pet’s death.  The person is sitting down on the concrete (on the tomb like stone) beside their pet.  The concrete is tomb like because of the pet’s death.

The person is crying (all is blurry) and the moment they are having is intensely focused (in the singularity).  The person pauses (after a moment) and certain thoughts come to their mind.

The first idea is two expressions of the notion that death is completely expected, but still hits like a surprise.  Two metaphors for this are given.  The first is the summer solstice, appearing in March.  The summer solstice is a completely predictable event.  Even down to the minute for a given location.  Yet, in the poem, it comes early, at an unexpected time.  The summer solstice was used as a metaphor for death, because it is the longest day of the year.  Each day after that, until the winter solstice, gets darker and darker.  It is a metaphor for how the person feels.

The second metaphor shows the idea of something unpredictable, a tornado, from something predicable, a hurricane.  The idea here is that a hurricane is big and ominous, but can be tracked with some predictability.  This is like the general idea of death.  A tornado though is often a complete surprise.  This is like the idea of a specific death.  There is a difference between the general idea of something, and the specific instance of it happening.

After this, the person feels a moment of self-consciousness.  They imagine people seeing them on the ground crying (to those in the stands).  They either think that these people will understand the sadness and significance of their emotions (it either makes sense) or that the people will look at them like they are foolish for crying about a dog (or is foolishness).

This brief moment of self-consciousness ends though as the person comes back to their situation.  They stop thinking and just feel where they are.  They go back to how they started, on the concrete (on the tomb like stone), crying (all is blurry) and in an intensely focused moment (in the singularity).

In terms of form, some elements are:

Lines two, three and four are repeated as lines fourteen, fifteen and sixteen.

All lines are between two and five words long.

Seven of the sixteen lines, end in a word, starting with ‘s’.

 

Hopefully you enjoyed this poem with an explanation.

Bilingual Poem: no photograph

The photograph isn’t here,
for the dog,
is over there.

La fotografía no está aquí,
para el perro,
está allí.

P. S. Happy Saint Patrick’s Day! If you were looking to have something green, why not purchase a copy of M. Sakran’s self-published eBook, Understanding: poems with explanations? It has a green cover.  You know … just a thought.

Artwork to inspire poetry: blueish flower

blueish flower

This artwork is a blueish flower.  This kind of flower has been on the blog before.  This particular artwork is an altered photograph.  A few steps were taken to turn the original photograph into the artwork here, however, they were fairly simple.

Here is a poem inspired by this artwork:

Lying in the grass,
the dog sniffed tilting its head,
she ate her first peach

 

P.S.  M. Sakran is currently accepting poems for consideration.  A poem sent in has an opportunity to be published on this blog.  See the Considerations page for more information.

Poem with an explanation: Seeing eye

In darkness,
when walking the cliff’s edge,
when surrounded by wolves,
when the path is covered,
something is said,
that the eye that sees,
has a tail.

 

This poem is about an aspect of blindness.  It questions the idea that there are “seeing eye dogs” but not “seeing eye people”.  It is an examination of humanity, in that it examines the idea, that a blind person can rely on a dog, but not another person.

In the poem, the first line “In darkness”, describes the blindness.  The next three lines describe perils of going out being blind.

The line, “when walking the cliff’s edge”, examines physical perils like curbs, doors and stairs.

The line, “when surround by wolves”, examines the perils from other people.

The line, “when the path is covered,” examines the peril of not being able to know what way to go.

The next line, “something is said”, refers to the examination of the idea.

The following line, “that the eye that sees,” is a play on the phrase seeing eye, of seeing eye dog.

The last line, “has a tail,” says that the eye that sees, is a dog.

The idea of the poem is to examine the reliability, loyalty, trust and dedication, that a person can find in a dog, but not in another person.  It’s meant to raise the question of why aren’t people better, so that “seeing eye people” would be something that existed.

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Experimental Poetry Form: 3 3 6

This experimental poetry form is called 3 3 6.  The form is as follows:

The first line has three words.

The second line has three words, that are not any of the words from the first line.

The third line has all of the words from the first and second lines, but no more and not in exactly the same order as they were in the first and second lines.

Here is an example:

The still cat,
watches a dog.

A still dog watches the cat.

Poem with an explanation: the glass barrier

the glass barrier
blocking hope in its mocking
relief is opaque
silently the statue breathes
as eyes stare in unblinking

 

This poem is a tanka.  It is written in the 57577 format.  There are two parts: the first three lines and the last two.

This poem is about a dog sitting outside looking at a glass door.  The dog is waiting for something.  It wants something from a person that is on the other side of the door.

The first line, the glass barrier, describes the door.  The door is glass with a metal frame.  The words in the line are meant to show a contrast.  The door is glass.  Glass is generally weak and breakable.  The door is also a barrier.  A barrier is something that stops something else from going through.  The idea is that something weak and breakable is blocking the dog from what it wants.

The second line, blocking hope in its mocking, is like the first.  The glass door blocks the hope of the dog.  It separates it from what it wants.  The door mocks though.  The door is glass.  Glass is weak.  This weak glass is blocking the dog.  The door is personified in the line.

The third line says, relief is opaque.  This line is a play on the idea of glass.  Generally, glass is clear and transparent.  The opposite of that is being opaque.  The dog wants relief, but can’t see it despite the clear glass door.

The next two lines shift the focus.  The first three lines focused on the door from the perspective of the dog.  The next two lines focus on the dog.

The fourth line of the poem says, silently the statue breathes.  The dog in the poem is sitting still in front of the door looking at it.  This line continues the idea of before of contrasting imagery.  In the line, a statue, which does not move, is breathing.

The last line says, as eyes stare in unblinking.  This line describes the dog looking at the door with intensity.  The idea reflects the idea of a statue from the line before.  A statue cloud be said to have eyes that stare unblinking.  This is not actually true though, as staring is an action and a statue is not acting in any way.  A statue only appears to be staring.  The dog though, is staring.  In some sense this is like the line before.  Together, the two lines are describing a statue breathing and staring.  A statue can’t do those things, but the dog is.  The dog is statue like though, because it is still in front of the door for an extended period of time.

Another point about the last line, is that the dog is staring in, not out.  Normally, staring is describing as staring out, as in “staring out in space”.  The dog though is staring in.  There are two ways to look at this.  First, literally, the dog is staring in the building through the glass of the door.  It wants something from the other side.  In another sense though, the line is describing introspection.  The dog is focused on what is on the other side of the door, but it is really focused on its internal feelings.  The dog is focused on what it wants from the other side of the door.

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Post Series: Poems with Explanations: No, you see

Today’s post is the twentieth and last post in the post series: poems with explanations.

Hopefully readers have enjoyed the series.  Hopefully all of the poems were enjoyable to read by themselves, but also, hopefully, the explanations expanded their value.  Hopefully readers learned more about poetry through the series.

If you liked the series and like poems with explanations in general, then please consider purchasing a copy of M. Sakran’s self-published eBook, Understanding: poems with explanations.  The eBook is a collection of twenty original poems, with explanations of each of them.  It is available for a price of $0.99.  It can also be purchased with currencies besides the U.S. dollar (see near the bottom of the post, Post Series: Poems with Explanations: Obstruction, for a list of usable currencies and links).  Again, if you liked the series and like poems with explanations in general, then please consider purchasing a copy.

The last poem and explanation of the series is below.

No, you see

What’s the matter?

You tired?

Alright, take a rest.

  Standing.

  Standing.

  Crouching.

  Left over middle.

  Right over middle.

  Left over middle.

  Right over middle.

  Picking up one.

  Picking up two.

  Standing.

Hi.

Hmm?

Oh, nothing, you see …

No, wait, you don’t understand.

No, you see there,

  One, two, three.

No, you

 

This poem is about someone getting shot and killed.  There are three beings in the poem: the person who is shot (the shootee), the shootee’s dog, and the shooter.  The poem begins with the shootee walking their dog and coming in front of the shooter’s house.  This poem is about misunderstanding and overreaction.

In the first line of the poem, the shootee asks their dog What’s the matter?.  The dog has stopped walking and is panting by the side of the street.  It is early morning.

In the second line of the poem, the shootee realizes that their dog is tired and asks their dog a rhetorical question about it.

In the third line, the shootee tells their dog to take a rest.  Where the person is walking, there are ditches in front of the homes.  In this line of the poem, as the shootee lets go of the leash and stands by the side of the road, the dog walks down into the ditch and lays down.

The next ten lines are indented.  These lines describe what the shootee does while their dog rests.  At first the shootee just stands.  The dog is resting for a while and the standing feels like it goes on.  The shootee’s legs get a little tired and so they crouch down.  They find some pine needles and start braiding them together.  They then stop this, and pick up a couple of pebbles and move them in their fingers.  After this, the shootee stands up again.

When the shootee stands, the homeowner comes out of their house.  The shootee says, Hi.  The homeowner (the shooter) is upset that someone has been standing in front of their house and asks angrily, “What are you doing here?”

The shootee is taken aback by this question and emotion and responds, “Hmm?”

The shooter then asks the question again, as they move closer and more angrily toward the shootee.

The shootee realizes the misunderstanding.  They realize that the shooter can only see them and not the dog, because the dog is in a ditch.  They understand the concern of the shooter.  They try to clear things up and explain by starting “Oh, nothing, you see …”

The shooter interrupts the shootee.  The shooter yells to the shootee to get away from the house.  The shooter moves closer and more angrily.

The shootee tries to explain again.

The shooter then repeats the demand that the shootee get away from the house.

The shootee tries to explain again.  As they do, they motion with their arm at the dog in the ditch.

When the shooter sees the shootee’s arm move, they assume the shootee is going to do something violent.  The shooter pulls out a gun and shoots the shootee.

The shootee hears three shots.

The shootee tries to explain as they die.

 

This poem is about a misunderstanding and overreaction that led to a shooting and killing.

The shootee in the poem was innocent.  In some sense, they made the mistake of loitering outside of someone’s home, but they had no criminal intent.

The shooter in the situation, was not really bad, but simply saw someone standing and waiting too long outside of their house.  The shooter never saw the shootee’s dog, which was in a ditch.  They felt threatened by the situation and even more threatened when they confronted the shootee and the shootee did not immediately leave.

This poem that is about a simple situation that escalated and went in the wrong direction.

One interesting aspect of this poem, in terms of its presentation, is that there is only one focus.  In the poem, the dog’s actions are not written out.  Also, the voice of the shooter is not directly articulated.  Only the words, and with one exception, only the actions of the shootee are shown.  The exception is the three gun shots.  These are articulated by the count in the poem.

In terms of form, in the poem, actions are indented two spaces (the actions of the person as they wait for their dog, and the gun shots).  Also, the last line ends abruptly, even without ellipses, to signify the shootee died.

Experimental Poetry Form: antonyms

This experimental poetry form is just like the experimental poetry form: homophones, except instead of using homophones, it uses antonyms.  Like before, the form has ten lines, each line has ten syllables, and the ten lines are grouped as couplets.  At the ends of each set of couplets, instead of having homophones, there are antonyms.

Here is an example poem:

Outside a dog was making a great noise,
and the dog would not be at all quiet.

He squeaked, yelped and barked with a sound so large,
for he had a hope that was not so small.

He knew that there was cool nice air inside,
and that it was hot and humid outside.

So he rang with force his gold bell of hope,
to take away his great and large despair.

And then with joy he saw the door open,
and on his sadness a large gate did close.