Poem Series: Time: Please take some time and read the words

It is Independence Day.
Please take some time,
and,
read the words that were declared
all those years ago this day
and think of what they mean.

Note: This poem uses the experimental poetry form American Independence Day.

P. S. There is a new set of photography, artwork, poetry and fiction on MSakran.com.

P. S. S. Happy Independence Day.

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Poetry essay: Developing experimental poetry forms

A recurring category on M. Sakran’s blog of and about poetry and poetry related things is experimental poetry form.  Experimental poetry forms are poetry forms thought up by M. Sakran.  Poets can write poems using the experimental poetry forms on this blog as a way to try out different ways to express poetry.

In addition to using the experimental poetry forms on this blog, poets can also develop their own forms.  There are a number of benefits to thinking up and using an experimental poetry form.

First, the exercise of working with form elements can be training for writing poetry.  As a poet combines different form elements together, they can see how they interact and learn more about using them.  This can help later as a poet writes poetry and incorporates form elements into their work.

Second, once a poetry form has been developed, writing a poem with it can also be training.  Trying to fit a poem to a new form can be a skill building exercise for a poet.  In addition to practicing fitting a poem to a form, a poet can also learn how different form elements interact and if they work well together.

Third, some of the forms developed could potentially turn out to be good for certain kinds of expressions and might be the kind of forms that could be used repeatedly.

Fourth, as readers read poems written with experimental poetry forms (even if they don’t know the forms are as such) they can learn from the experience of reading poems written with different form elements.

If a poet is interested in developing their own experimental poetry forms, there are a number of form elements they could use.  An incomplete list includes:

  the number of stanzas

  the number of lines in each stanza and or in the whole poem

  the number of line breaks between each stanza

  the number of words per line, stanza and or in the whole poem

  the number of syllables per word, line, stanza and or in the whole poem

  the number of letters per word, line, stanza and or in the whole poem

  rhyming within lines, stanzas, between stanzas and or in the whole poem

  meter such as iambic or trochaic applied to words, lines, stanzas or the whole poem,

  the number of spaces of indentions of lines

  the number of spaces between words within lines

  acrostic qualities applied to lines, stanzas, between stanzas and or to the whole poem

  page layout (e.g. a poem that looks like a square or a triangle or a poem that is centered or right aligned)

  different word arrangements (e.g. the first word of one line of a poem becomes the last word of another line of the poem)

  repeated words, lines or stanzas

  directional qualities such as the poem is read from the bottom of the page up

  using elements such as homophones, homographs or synonyms

These different elements (as well as others) could be combined in different numbers and ways and could be used in different patterns.  There are a multitude of poetry forms that could be developed from them.

In developing an experimental poetry form, one approach might be for a poet to simply pick different elements and different qualities for those elements and see how they work together.  The idea would be to see what develops without starting with a more specific goal in mind.

Alternatively, a poet might want to develop experimental poetry forms according to specific goals.  They might want to see, for example, what a poem sounds like using a certain repeat pattern or how two poetry meters work when combined together.

When developing an experimental poetry form, a poet should keep themselves, another poet who might use the form, and the reader of poems written in the form in mind.  They want to make sure and develop a form that works in the development stage, is something that can be used by other poets if the form was explained, and is something that can be used to create poems where the form impacts the expression for the reader.

Poem with an explanation: wheeling forward

There’s a time of hindrance wheeling forward in the chair,
the rugs, carpet and doorways rise from the earth,
like a hand was waved and stones obeyed,
like the whole house was of quicksand,
like mountains fled beyond all sight.
Then there is the moment,
when forgetfulness creeps in,
and eyes clinch,
silently loud,
crying.
Lying,
once proud,
moving an inch,
and there’s the din,
that from pain was sent,
and all time seems a blight,
and humility does join the stage band,
and a song of simple need is played,
and notes call out to alleviate an unthought-of dearth,
and to the whiteness of the clouds eyes do stare.

 

In terms of form, this poem uses the experimental poetry form: two triangles from the March 9, 2018 post on this blog.  Check the post for information about the form.

This poem is about a person who has broken their leg and is in a wheelchair.  It looks at the initial time of their experience.

The first sentence looks at the experience as the person first starts to wheel about their house.  They experience the fact that their house is not set up for a person in a wheelchair.  They encounter rugs and carpets that are difficult to roll over and doorways that are too narrow.  They move slowly through everything they do because it is difficult to get about and things they want seem like they have moved far away.

In the second sentence, the person is lying in bed.  They have just awoken and they start to roll out of bed, like they did before their injury, because in that moment they have forgotten they are hurt.  As they move, they feel pain and they clinch their eyes and grimace.

In the third sentence, the person finds they need help for even simple things.

The poem looks at the initial time of a person in a wheelchair.  It looks at the initial experience and the start of the transition from walking to having to roll in the chair.  It looks at the difficulty of that time period.

 

P. S. There will be no new post on M. Sakran’s blog of and about poetry and poetry related things on Friday April 6, 2018. The next new post will be on Monday April 9, 2018. It will be a milestone post.

Poem with an explanation: hiding

At five,
before light,
packed up,
to the car,
moved some,
changed the shirt,
pack held,
bathroom time,
one check,
diligence.

 

This poem is about a homeless man.  He was evicted from his apartment, but can’t afford to move somewhere else.  He has a job, and finds a way to live at work.  He goes to efforts to hide this from his coworkers.

The poem starts, At five.  The man wakes up at five a.m. from where he sleeps in the warehouse that he works in.  He has made a space for himself in one of shelving areas.  He wakes up this early because no one will be at work.

The next line, before light, goes with the first, and implies that he does things in darkness to avoid being seen.

The third line, packed up, describes the man packing up his sleeping items from where he was in the warehouse.

In the fourth line, to the car, the man takes these items and hides them in his car.

He then moves his car (moves some), so that his coworkers won’t see his car always in the same spot.  The idea is for them to think that he goes and comes to work.

After the man moves his car, he changes his shirt (changed the shirt).  Because he works in a warehouse, and wears blue jeans and work boots to work, he doesn’t have to change the rest of his clothes.

He then takes a pack of toiletries (pack held), and goes to the bathroom (bathroom time) to shave and wash and make himself look clean.

He lastly checks how he looks before he leaves (one check).

The poem ends by implying that the man was successful in hiding his homelessness.  The word diligence describes the diligence of his behavior but also describes how he is seen by his superiors at work.  They notice that he is the first to arrive each morning and the last to leave.  They see him as a good employee.

The idea of the poem is to describe how the man thinks others will view his homelessness.  He feels that it would be detrimental if his coworkers or superiors found out.  He is worried about the social consequences as well as if he would lose his job.  He believes that his situation is temporary, in that he will be able to save money while he lives rent-free at work and that he will be able to rent an apartment soon.  He also feels that how he lives is the best solution to his temporary problem.  He feels that hiding his temporary situation will be the best thing for him.

The idea of the poem is to have the social view of homelessness in the background of the man’s actions.

In terms of form, this poem uses the experimental poetry form: two and three from this blog.  The short lines had an effect on the presentation of the ideas.

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Post Series: Poems with Explanations: Trying

The forms all day,
blurs of empty repetition,
the pointlessness surrounds,
in speechlessness.

All the lost days,
the insides fill with contrition,
summer hibernation,
seems so endless.

A bold dark line,
an answer to the petition,
a wonder at fool’s gold,
holds all sense back.

The village edge,
the end of the expedition,
a nearby waving hand,
and it all goes.

 

This poem deals with someone looking for a job.  As the poem starts, the person has been looking for a job for some time.  They are at a point of dejection.

In the first line, The forms all day, the person has been filling out job applications online all day.  They have been doing this for months.  It is starting to overwhelm them emotionally.  They feel all the applications blending together and it seems like pointless repetition (blurs of empty repetition) as it has not led to a job.  This sense of pointlessness surrounds them (the pointlessness surrounds) and they feel at a loss and can’t express how they feel (in speechlessness).

The person reflects on how long they have been without a job.  They feel like it has been wasted time (All the lost days).  They think back to when they had a job, and how few steps they took to prepare for a time if they lost it.  They are filled with regret (the insides fill with contrition).  They feel like they are missing something of life now.  It is like they are hibernating in the summer (summer hibernation) (when there is something to miss, as opposed to the winter).  They feel like their state of unemployment will not end (seems so endless).

In the next stanza, there is a change.  The person checks their email and instead of seeing nothing or emails they have been opened, they see a new one (A bold dark line).  This email is different from past ones, in that it is not from a company (and by extension a form rejection) it is from a person (an answer to the petition).  The person almost gets excited, but realizing that it may just be a rejection (a wonder at fool’s gold) they hold their emotions down (holds all sense back).

The person checks the email and it is someone wanting to schedule a job interview with them.  All of a sudden, the person feels relief.  They feel like they have made it to their destination (The village edge) and that their trial is over (the end of the expedition).  The person reads again the offer of an interview (a nearby waving hand) and a sense of relief over what they have been through comes over them (and it all goes).

This poem is a form poem.  It uses the experimental poetry from: centered stanzas that was on this blog on August 10, 2016.  To summarize, the form has four centered stanzas, the syllable counts per line of each stanza are 4, 8, 6, and 4, and the second line of each stanza rhymes.

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M. Sakran’s self-published book of poems with explanations called Understanding: poems with explanations is available for purchase as an eBook for an available price of $0.99. Buy your copy today!

To help celebrate the self-publication of this book, there is a post series of poems with explanations on the blog.  Above is a poem with an explanation for the series.  This poem with an explanation (as well as the rest in the series) is not from the book.  It is a different one that is part of this post series for readers to read and enjoy.

Poem with an explanation: arranged

Olives, peppers, mixed,

roasted pepper plate,

sliced tomato tray,

marinated things,

arranged for a late meal,

lonely, eaten here

 

The poem above uses the experimental poetry form: thorns with a flower bud from the January 7, 2016 post on M. Sakran’s blog of and about poetry and poetry related things.

In keeping with the form, the poem was written so that it would seem slightly off.  The first four lines describe food that might be seen as tasting good.  The meter though, is intended to make the lines not seem quite right.

The fifth line, with its iambic tetrameter meter is intended to sound more natural.  Additionally, it explains the first four lines.  At this point, the poem should change in tone from seeming somewhat off, to somewhat positive.

The last line though, goes back to the previous form, and because it reveals that this meal is being eaten by someone who is lonely, and presumably alone, it goes back to the poem not sounding as positive as it could.

Poem Series: Experimental Poetry Forms: Hopping frog: Seven apples

Seven kinds of apples,
four in a row, three in a row,
and in different colors

Three are mainly red hued,
two are mainly green in color,
and two are mixed in tone

The apples were set up,
because of an artistic thought,
to paint a nice picture

 

A photo was taken,
because the apples might go bad,
before the art was done

 

Hopefully when painted,
the art will be alright to see,
and it will be liked by some

The painting may start soon,
with acrylic paint on canvas,
and apples will be art

 
(40/40) Experimental Poetry Form: Hopping frog

 

Today’s poem is the last poem in this poem series.  The series has had forty poems, each one, using an experimental poetry form that has been on this blog.

Starting tomorrow, the more usual posts containing poems, experimental poetry forms, photographs to inspire poetry, artwork to inspire poetry, poetry topic ideas, poems with explanations and bilingual poems, will return, at least for a time.

Hopefully, this poem series has been enjoyed, and hopefully also, readers were encouraged to experiment with the forms.

P.S. Today on MSakran.com, there is a new set of photography, artwork, poetry and fiction.

Poem Series: Experimental Poetry Forms: Eight: The dog outside

A plate of food with knife and fork,
  the dog outside does make a sound,
a feeling of some right and wrong,
and though inertia adds a weight,
the thought of justice fills the mind,
and so the chair is pushed on out,
and steps go to the nearby door,
and food goes in the bowl with sound.

The work is done, a glass is filled,
  the dog outside pants in the heat,
though rationality does speak,
and though it sounds most clearly sure,
a sense the words it says are false,
does cause the legs to move away,
the handle then is slowly turned,
and water flows for the poor hound.

The lightning strikes and thunder cracks,
  the dog outside whimpers in fear,
the logic says that all is fine,
that what is feared is far away,
that there outside all is alright,
but then the thought of being there,
does cause the hand to turn the knob,
and have the dog feel like it’s found.

An ache is felt within the back,
  the dog outside takes time to stand,
and though it seems to be excess,
as the small pills fall in the hand,
those words come back and fill the ears,
and as the pain does the twinge again,
a note is made on the short list,
and the next day new pills abound.

Alone without a voice nearby,
  the dog outside is still and stares,
and though the sense is felt inside,
it takes some time to realize,
that there outside it is felt too,
and so a thought does then occur,
and the small ball is carried out,
and the dog jumps with a large bound.

The dog next door did run away,
  the dog outside sits by the fence,
and though a search is made for days,
the importance of it is low,
until the eyes of the dog stare,
and ask for help without loud words,
and then again the search goes on,
as cars do drive and search around.

The vet was called, the time was set,
  the dog outside did hesitate,
the words were said that this was good,
and words were said of benefit,
but in the car the dog did shake,
and as it went some tears did fall,
and then the sense of this from past,
had empathy grow in a mound.

The man outside did fall and cringe,
  the dog outside did understand,
and the dog barked at the near fence,
and the dog barked with a loud sound,
and men did come in uniforms,
to make the dog have silence then,
but they did see the man who fell,
and then the dog did bark unbound.

 

(38/40) Experimental Poetry Form: Eight

Poem Series: Experimental Poetry Forms: Acrostic matching and rhyming: Day after equinox

Dawn began with light so gold,
a morning of change was here,
yet though the day was not old,
a morning of change was here.

For though today we are so told,
“The days of past have lost their hold,”
expecting change that we can see,
 red and yellow colors so bold,
expecting change that we can see,
quietly we stand in air not cold,
understanding the words that we were sold,
in expectation of a different mold,
outside we stand as sounds are polled,
xylophone notes familiarly rolled.

 

(37/40) Experimental Poetry Form: Acrostic matching and rhyming