Poem with an explanation: A dark celebration

There are celebrations,
celebrations on the mountain peak,
of the glowing warmth,
and dances in the wildflower fields.

But this is false,
for there behind the mountain peak,
the wings of dread do spread,
and the flight of darkness soars.

But in the fields,
all is joy,
as butterflies fly,
from bloom to bloom.

But the edges darken,
from red to black,
and the swallowing of all,
begins.

It all seems joy,
as arms twirl about,
and all the warm,
fills the land.

But tears do fall,
from knowing eyes,
for they do know,
the fire dims.

The cheers of joy,
for what is high,
not seeing that,
today it falls.

 

This poem is about the summer solstice.  It might depend on where a person lives, but the summer solstice could start late tonight.  Tomorrow, will be the longest day of the year, in terms of sunlight.

The longest day of the year is often celebrated because it has the most light of any day of the year.  This poem takes a different perspective and looks at it as a day of dread.

It is a day of dread, because from this point on, until the winter solstice, every day will get shorter.  Since this is the peak, it is the start of the fall.  This day is the last day when light grows, and because of this, the poem takes the perspective that it is a day to be feared, rather than celebrated.

The poem alternates between celebration and dread.  The first stanza is one of celebration.  It describes the celebration of the longest day (the mountain peak), of all the sunshine (the glowing warmth) and talks of the celebration of nature (dances in the wildflower fields).

The next stanza starts the dread.  It uses a metaphor of a dragon.  It says that the celebrating is for something false.  It says that after the longest day (behind the mountain peak), something ominous is coming (the wings of dread do spread) and this ominous thing is the increasing darkness from this point until the winter solstice (the flight of darkness soars).

In the next stanza, there is an unawareness of this.  It is as if the people celebrating in the field, don’t see the shadow rise behind the mountain.  The stanza talks of joy, butterflies and blooms.

The following stanza goes back to the ominous idea.  It uses the imagery of darkness swallowing all.  Like a cloud of darkness starting at the horizons and covering the land.  It uses the image of “red to black” to play off the idea of a sunset.

In the field though, there is an unawareness.  The celebrations continue as people bask in the sunshine and dance about.

This is contrasted in the next stanza by a sense of sadness by those that know that a peak leads to a fall.  It is as if all are celebrating the fire at its highest, but there are some that know that the highest point means that it gets lower after that.

The last stanza puts the ideas together and says that the peak is celebrated, but that is because it isn’t seen as the start of the fall.

This poem consists of seven stanzas.  Each stanza is four lines long.  The first six stanzas alternate between happiness and dread.  The last stanza has both ideas together.

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Poem with an explanation: Sitting down

Sitting down,
on the tomb like stone,
all is blurry,
in the singularity,
after a moment,
the summer solstice,
appearing in March,
a tornado,
from the hurricane,
to those in the stands,
it either makes sense,
or is foolishness,
but there,
on the tomb like stone,
all is blurry,
in the singularity.

Above is a poem.  Below is its explanation.  Before you read the explanation though, take a moment, and think about what you think the poem means.  Then, as you read the explanation, you can see how your interpretation of the poem compares with the intended meaning of the poem.

Did you think it meant something different?

Did you think it meant the same thing?

Were you surprised?

Was it what you expected?

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Here is the explanation of the poem:

This is a poem about a person whose pet has died in front of them.  The pet died of some illness.

The poem starts after the pet’s death.  The person is sitting down on the concrete (on the tomb like stone) beside their pet.  The concrete is tomb like because of the pet’s death.

The person is crying (all is blurry) and the moment they are having is intensely focused (in the singularity).  The person pauses (after a moment) and certain thoughts come to their mind.

The first idea is two expressions of the notion that death is completely expected, but still hits like a surprise.  Two metaphors for this are given.  The first is the summer solstice, appearing in March.  The summer solstice is a completely predictable event.  Even down to the minute for a given location.  Yet, in the poem, it comes early, at an unexpected time.  The summer solstice was used as a metaphor for death, because it is the longest day of the year.  Each day after that, until the winter solstice, gets darker and darker.  It is a metaphor for how the person feels.

The second metaphor shows the idea of something unpredictable, a tornado, from something predicable, a hurricane.  The idea here is that a hurricane is big and ominous, but can be tracked with some predictability.  This is like the general idea of death.  A tornado though is often a complete surprise.  This is like the idea of a specific death.  There is a difference between the general idea of something, and the specific instance of it happening.

After this, the person feels a moment of self-consciousness.  They imagine people seeing them on the ground crying (to those in the stands).  They either think that these people will understand the sadness and significance of their emotions (it either makes sense) or that the people will look at them like they are foolish for crying about a dog (or is foolishness).

This brief moment of self-consciousness ends though as the person comes back to their situation.  They stop thinking and just feel where they are.  They go back to how they started, on the concrete (on the tomb like stone), crying (all is blurry) and in an intensely focused moment (in the singularity).

In terms of form, some elements are:

Lines two, three and four are repeated as lines fourteen, fifteen and sixteen.

All lines are between two and five words long.

Seven of the sixteen lines, end in a word, starting with ‘s’.

 

Hopefully you enjoyed this poem with an explanation.

Poem with an explanation: Out in the ocean

Below is a poem with an explanation.  Before reading it, please check out M. Sakran’s self-published collection of poems with explanations, Understanding: poems with explanations.  After you read the poem and explanation below, if you like the idea of a poet explaining their poem so that you know exactly what it means (such that you could learn more about poetry by reading what one means – which is the general idea of the eBook), then consider purchasing a copy of M. Sakran’s eBook.  The eBook has twenty poems that have in depth explanations.  The idea, is that by reading what some poems really mean, the reader can hopefully better understand poetry and improve their reading and writing of it.  Thank you very much, enjoy the poem and explanation, and hopefully you’ll check out the book.

 

Out in the ocean,
holding on,
to a piece of the wreckage.

There’s floating,
trying to strain plankton from the water,
hoping it will rain,
and the sun won’t be too hot.

In the delirium,
there’s a sight,
far away,
a mountain,
and there,
in the valley,
in the cool air,
and greenness,
peace.

In the moments,
as eyes look out,
there are plans,
plans about the hut,
and its expansion,
plans about fishing,
and setting up traps,
plants and fruits,
and planting bushes,
plans of tools,
plans of ropes,
plans.

But there,
out in the ocean,
the leg kicks are in vain,
the arm reaching out grabs nothing,
sometimes,
in the back,
things float by,
but they aren’t seen.

The mind flows,
to thoughts of drift wood,
to finding a plastic sheet,
to finding a floating drum.

It all mixes,
but then again,
there’s the beach,
and the hut,
and there again,
there’s the mountain,
and the valley.

Out in the ocean,
holding on,
to a piece of the wreckage.

 

This poem is about the state of a person’s life.  It exams three ideas: where they are, where they want to be in the near future and what their dream is.  As an analogy, the reader might think of a person in a state of unemployment (where they are), the next job they hope to get (where they want to be in the near future) and the business they hope to own (what their dream is).  The idea though, could be applied to many other situations.  The poem contrasts the person’s dreams with their actions and reality.

In the first stanza, the person is in a state of despair.  Life is not going well.  They are out in the ocean, holding on to a piece of the wreckage.  They aren’t drowning, but they are just holding on.  The wreckage is part of what was keeping the person afloat before.  It was whatever helped them not be in the situation they are in.  Using the job analogy, it might be some sort of side work that relates to what they used to do, that the person is getting so that they can just barely make it, at least for a while.

In the second stanza, the person is doing little things to get by (strain plankton from the water) and hoping something good will happen (it will rain) and that something bad won’t happen (the sun won’t be too hot).

In their condition, they dream of what they wish for.  It is something that gives them a sense of peace and comfort.  It is as different from where they are as things can be.  In the poem, the peaceful place is in the mountains, which is as far a departure from the sea as a person can be, in a sense.  Using the job analogy, this is the person’s dream of owning their own business.

In the following stanza, the person dreams two steps ahead.  Using the job analogy, it would be like a person dreaming about what the promotion they would get after they get an entry level job, would be like.  They dream of the improvements it will bring in their life.  They skip over the entry level job in their thoughts.

In the next stanza, the person has a moment of reality.  They try to improve their situation but nothing works.  They also miss opportunities.

When these moments of reality hit, the person stops thinking of the far away goal, and even the near term goal, and starts to think about their present.  They think of small things, that in any other situation, wouldn’t be seen as achievements, but in their current situation do.

The reality is unpleasant for the person though.  Thinking of inches, when there are dreams of miles is disheartening to them.  They again start to dream about the near term goal and the future wish.

In the end, the person is still in their reality.

This poem contrasts a person’s reality with their aspirations.  The person in the poem is a dreamer, but they don’t seem to be able to move forward to their dreams.  They get ahead of themselves.  They dream of improving life on the beach and living in the mountains, while they are floating on a piece of a shipwreck in the ocean.  They are focused on tomorrow, but not paying enough attention to today.

Although the poem was described using the idea of a person’s employment condition, it could be extended to many other ideas.  For example, a person who isn’t in shape might be dreaming about running a 5K and a marathon.  It could also be applied a person who has trouble getting a date, thinking about what it would be like to date someone and be married.  It also might be used to talk about a person with an addiction, thinking about what it would be like to be six months sober and two years sober.  In all the ideas, the person is getting ahead of themselves.  They aren’t able to improve their current situation, but they dream of the situation being changed.

In terms of form, the poem is divided into eight stanzas. The number of lines per stanza varies between three and twelve.  With exception of the second four line stanza, the number of lines per stanza increases to a point and then decreases to a point.  Had that idea been more important, the second four line stanza could have been increased to seven lines long, and the seven line stanza could have been decreased to six lines long, to maintain the idea.

In the poem, the first and last stanzas are the same.  The idea was to provide circularity.  Despite all the thought and dreaming, the condition of the person is the same at the end of the poem as at the start.

In the third stanza, the phrase “in the” is repeated three times.  In the first use, it is negative, in the second two uses, it is meant to take the reader into the person’s dream.

The fourth stanza starts with “in the”.  In the third stanza, the situation was “In the delirium”.  In the fourth stanza, it is “In the moments”.  The two “in the” phrases from the third stanza, transitioned the person’s state of mind so that they are fully dreaming.

In the fifth stanza, the word “plans” is repeated six times.  The idea was show how much the person in the poem was dreaming.  They had detailed ideas about what they wanted.  They were planning.  This is contrasted with doing.

In the second to last stanza, “to finding a” is repeated twice.  The idea was to emphasize the person grasping for scraps in their situation.  The state of the person is bad to a point, that things that are seen as debris, are useful to them.

 

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Poem with an explanation: Little Billy’s Birthday

Little Billy’s dad told him he should like football.

Little Billy replied that he did not.

Little Billy’s dad told him that was silly, that all boys should like football.

Little Billy replied that he did not.

Little Billy’s dad told him that for Billy’s birthday, he would buy Billy a football.

Little Billy replied that he did not want a football.

Little Billy’s dad told him that was silly and he would get one.

Little Billy replied that he did not want a football.

 

Little Billy’s birthday came, and his dad gave him a football.

Little Billy looked sad.

Little Billy’s dad asked why he looked sad.

Little Billy replied because he did not want a football.

Little Billy’s dad said that was silly, that all boys should like football.

Little Billy replied that he did not.

Little Billy’s dad said that all boys like football.

Little Billy replied that he had told his dad that he did not.

Little Billy’s dad said that Billy had not said anything like that.

Little Billy replied he had.

Little Billy’s dad said that was not true.

Little Billy replied he had told his dad twice.

Little Billy’s dad said that Billy was ungrateful.

Little Billy asked his dad why he would buy him something he knew he did not want.

Little Billy’s dad said that Billy was spoiled.

Little Billy asked his dad why he couldn’t have gotten him something he liked for his birthday.

Little Billy’s dad said he should be happy he got anything.

Little Billy asked why his dad had treated him this way.

Little Billy’s dad did not understand.

Little Billy asked why his dad had to do something to his son rather than for his son, even on his birthday.

Little Billy’s dad did not understand.

Little Billy asked why his dad could not have just been nice to him on his birthday.

Little Billy’s dad got mad, cancelled Billy’s birthday, and sent Billy to his room.

Little Billy sat in his room alone.

Little Billy stayed awake until 12:00:01 am.

 

This poem is about a little boy’s birthday.  It tells the story of the boy getting a present he did not like for his birthday.  Rather than it being a poem about an ungrateful child, it is a poem about a boy whose father doesn’t listen to him or care about his feelings.  The present the boy got was something his father wanted him to have, but not something he wanted.  The idea of the poem is that the father is concerned with his view of things and doesn’t care about his son’s view, even on his son’s birthday.  This reflects their relationship overall.

The poem starts before the boy’s birthday.  He is having a conversation with his dad.  His dad thinks his son should like football, but his son doesn’t.  The dad doesn’t listen to his son and dismisses him.  The dad feels so much that his son should like football that he tells him he will buy him one for his birthday.  Twice his son says that he does not want a football.  He is dismissed by his dad.

When the boy’s birthday comes, his dad gives him a football.  The boy is sad.  When the dad asks him why, he responds because he does not like football.  His dad dismisses what he says and insists that all boys like football.

The son tells his dad that he had said that he did not like football.  His dad denies that his son said this.  They go back and forth and his son says that he had told his dad twice that he did not like football.

The dad calls the son ungrateful.  The son questions why his dad would buy him something he knew that he did not want.  The dad calls the son spoiled.  The son questions why his dad couldn’t have gotten him something he liked for his birthday.  His dad says he should be happy he got anything.

The son questions his treatment but his dad does not understand.  His son asks why his dad did something to him rather than for him on his birthday.  Again the dad does not understand.  The son questions why his dad could not have been nice to him on his birthday.  The dad gets mad, cancels the birthday, and sends his son to his room.

The son sits in his room alone and stays awake until his birthday completely ends.

 

This is a poem about listening, perspective, understanding, kindness, and importance.

In the poem, the dad does not listen to his son.  He sees the world a certain way, and doesn’t seem to comprehend why his son doesn’t see it the same.  The dad wants what he wants and disregards how his son feels.

The dad didn’t listen to his son and couldn’t see things from his son’s point of view.  He wanted something for his son and couldn’t see past that.  When his son isn’t happy having a day that was supposed to be special for him, turn into a day where his dad imposes something on him, his dad doesn’t understand.  The son is insulted and punished and his birthday is spoiled because the dad thought it was more important to do what he wanted to his son, rather than doing something for his son.  He couldn’t see that his son’s birthday was an important day where his son should be given importance.  He simply thought something and did it.  He didn’t think how his son would feel.  To the son, the day was important for him; for the dad, the day was just a day to do what he wanted to his son.

 

Every line of this poem starts with “Little Billy” or “Little Billy’s”.  While this may seem repetitive, it was done intentionally.  The idea was first, to stress the importance of the son.  The poem is about him and his perspective.  Second, is the idea that Billy is “little”.  He is little for a few reasons.  First, he is young.  He is just a little boy.  Second, in the poem he is meek.  His dad is big and imposing and he is small and helpless.  Third, Billy is a junior.  He is named after his dad.  This goes back to the idea of control.  His dad named his son after himself as a way to control him.

In the first section of the poem, the part before the party, in every statement of Billy’s dad, his dad tells him something.  He doesn’t speak with his son, but to his son.  In that same section, every time Billy speaks, he replies to his dad.  Billy is talking with his dad, not to him.  In this section, Billy’s words are repeated.  His first two lines are the same and his last two lines are the same.  This stresses that Billy was clear about how he felt.

In the next section, Little Billy’s lines continue primarily with the idea of either replying or asking.  His dad in this section says things to Billy or acts.

 

In some ways, this poem is about perspective.  Some reading it may side with the dad, and think Billy was ungrateful, spoiled and should be happy he got anything.  Presumably, there are some who feel that way.  For those he see it from that perspective though, imagine for a moment, if you were a vegetarian, and someone bought you meat for your birthday because they thought you should eat it.  Would you feel like Billy?

Others reading this poem though, may see it from the point of view of Billy.  Billy’s birthday was supposed to be a very special day for him, but it was changed into something else.  Billy wanted his birthday to be special and important for him and it wasn’t.  His dad put himself first, rather than his son.

 

P. S. Do you like poems with explanations? If so, you can purchase a copy of M. Sakran’s self-published collection of poems with explanations called, Understanding: poems with explanations.  It has twenty poems, each with a detailed explanation.  If you like explained poems, you should buy a copy.

Poem with an explanation: A statue

A statue

So very tired,
very tired,

tired.

Looking out,
a statue of stillness,
with a walking will,
and a silent form,
a sigh of breath,
is quiet.

Slices of trees,
a blending of plants,
something of philosophy,
and chemistry,
a cbc,
and the number’s low.

A sigh of breath,
so very tired,
a fortnight flows,
and there’s the sun,
detachment speaks,
and skies grow dark.

 

This poem is about a person with anemia.  The person has a low red blood count for some reason, and has low energy.

In the first two stanzas of the poem, the expression of the person’s condition is expressed.  The person is tired.  It is an overwhelming thing.  Three times in these two stanzas the word tired is used.  The lines get progressively shorter, to symbolize the person losing their breath as they try to say that they’re tired.  The line break between the stanzas also symbolizes this.

The next stanza is about the difference between how the person feels in their mind and how they feel in their body.  The person is looking out at the world (Looking out), but because of their anemia, they can’t move much (a statue of stillness).  They want to be active (with a walking will) but their weakness will not let them (and a silent form).  The person has labored breathing (a sigh of breath) but they can’t speak to express themselves (is quiet).

At some point, the person goes to the doctor because of how they feel.  At this point they just feel tired, but their anemia and the reason for it have not been told to them.  The person gets a blood test that they get back as a report.

The blood test comes back on pieces of paper (Slices of trees).  The papers have a lot of information on them in ink (a blending of plants).  There are many numbers (something of philosophy) and information from various blood measurements (and chemistry).  The person had a complete blood count test (cbc) and it shows that their red blood cell count is low (and the number’s low).

The person has to wait for the interpretation of the results to know what is causing the anemia they have.  While they are waiting, they grow weaker (A sigh of breath, so very tired).  They wait two weeks (a fortnight flows) and then in the morning (and there’s the sun) they go to the doctor.  The doctor speaks to them (detachment speaks) and tells them that their anemia is cause by something serious (and skies grow dark).

P. S. Do you like poems with explanations? Would you like to buy a copy of an eBook of them?  You can!  You can purchase a copy of M. Sakran’s self-published collection of poems with explanations called, Understanding: poems with explanations.  It has twenty poems, each with a detailed explanation.  If you like explained poems, you should buy a copy.

P. S. S. There is a new set of photography, artwork, poetry and fiction on MSakran.com. The photograph is of a moth, the artwork is of a banana, and the poetry combines the two ideas into a poem about a person in a wheel chair.  The poem was used as the basis for the short story.  Go to MSakran.com to see the set.

Poem with an explanation: There is joy

There is joy,
for nothing is the same.

Before,
no matter what,
all was lost.

Now,
no matter what,
all is won.

Floating in nothingness,
seeing it all crumble,
realizing it will be burned,
it made the greatest endeavors,
into sand castles.

But here,
but now,
but after unspeakable triumph,
all has meaning,
all has purpose,
all has fulfilment.

There is joy,
for nothing is the same.

 

Yesterday was Easter (Pascha).  Happy Easter!  Easter, is what this poem’s about.

The poem examines the reality of life and death before The Resurrection and after.  The poem follows a pattern of before and after.

In terms of the pattern, the stanzas are: 1st – after, 2nd – before, 3rd – after, 4th – before, 5th – after, 6th – after.

The poem uses the alternation found in stanzas 2 – 5 to compare and contrast the reality of life and death before and after The Resurrection.  It talks about a sense of meaninglessness (before) and a sense of meaning (after).

In terms of form, the poem is six stanzas.  Stanzas 1 and 6 are the same.  Stanzas 2 and 3 follow a pattern.  In stanza 5, the first three lines start with “but” and the last three start with “all has”.

Happy Easter!

Poem with an explanation: Never, ever, ever

What’s this?
 
  It say’s glass cleaner.
 
So spray it on the table?
 
  Sure.
 
What’s that smell?
 
  Maybe that’s just what it smells like?
 
Are you sure this is glass cleaner?
 
  That’s what it says.
 
Alright.
 
.
 
.
 
.
 
(Eating the apple pieces off the table.)
 
Hey, she doesn’t look good.
 
  What’s wrong?
 
She’s breathing funny and her eyes look bad.
 
  What’s wrong?
 
It’s okay. It’s okay. We need to take her to the hospital.
 
  Oh no, what’s happening!
 
.
 
.
 
.
 
(ICU, machines blinking)
 
(Tears, shaking, rocking back and forth)
 
Hello?
 
  Yes?
 
We’ve run some tests.
 
  What’s happening?
 
It seems to be bug spray.
 
  Bug spray?
 
Did she drink it or play in some grass with it or get it on her hands?
 
  No, never.
 
Well, she got it in her somehow.
 
  What’s going to happen? Will she be alright?
 
Well, the thing is …
 

There are some things that are just plain wrong. One of those things, is when there is a spray bottle or other container that says one thing, but there is something else in it. This can happen when the bottle or container is empty of what it originally had, and someone fills it with something else because they needed a spray bottle or container at the moment.
 
Never do this.
 
Never, ever, do this.
 
Never, ever, ever do this.
 
It is wrong. It is very dangerous. First, what is added to the container, may react with what was in it before. Even if it was cleaned, it can still react with residue. Second, what is added to the container, might react with the container itself, causing a reaction. Third, often the new container isn’t relabeled. This can cause confusion. This confusion could lead to many bad things. Fourth, even if the container is relabeled, the relabeling may not be clear because the container might still look like what it was before.
 
Again,
 
Never, ever, ever, put something in a container other than what it is labeled. Ever.
 
This poem, is about the consequences of doing such a thing. In the poem, an empty container of glass cleaner, was filled with bug spray. Somebody did this, because they thought it was convenient at the time and they had intended to relabel it, but never did.
 
Later, someone uses the container to clean a glass top table. The table isn’t wiped completely and after a child eats apple pieces off of it, the child gets sick.
 
The point of the poem, is to make a point:
 
Never, ever, ever, put something in a container other than what it is labeled. Ever.
 
Hopefully it has made the point.
 
Never, ever, ever, put something in a container other than what it is labeled. Ever.
 
In terms of form, the poem has three sections. The first section is about the cleaning of the table. The second section is about the apple being eaten. The third section is at the hospital.
 
With the exception of the parts in parenthesis, the poem is a conversation. In each section, there are two people speaking. The change in indention, signifies a change in who’s speaking.
 
In the first two sections, the child’s parents are speaking, and in the third section, a doctor is speaking to one of the parents.
 

P. S. As a note, there will be no new blog post, tomorrow April 14, 2017, on this blog.

Post Series: The Dragonfly Series: Poem with an explanation: Dragonfly ideas

This is the last post in the Dragonfly Post Series.  Hopefully it has been enjoyed.  Regular posts start again tomorrow.  Today’s post is a poem with an explanation.  Here’s the poem:

Darting around the sky,
in bursts and flashes,
moving among the trees,
so far away.

In bursts and flashes,
they can all be seen,
so far away,
yet moving close by.

They can all be seen,
in small little moments,
yet moving close by,
there is a hope.

In small little moments,
there is a clarity,
there is a hope,
there is a chance.

There is a clarity,
when things slow down,
there is a chance,
when there is patience.

When things slow down,
a reward can be found,
when there is patience,
a gem is revealed.

A reward can be found,
looking outward,
a gem is revealed,
darting around the sky.

 

This poem is about two things.  It is about dragonflies and ideas (as in an invention or a way to solve a problem).  The language of the poem, describes both.

In the first stanza, the dragonflies are described flying about.  This also describes ideas that haven’t quite been held on to.

In the second stanza, the dragonflies are described as flying quickly and far away, and yet still coming close by.  This is related to ideas that aren’t quite formed in a person’s mind, but there are times when it seems like they might be.

In the third stanza, the dragonflies appear fleetingly, yet because they come close by, there is hope that they will be seen more clearly and closely.  This same idea is applied to ideas.  When a person is trying to think of something new, they might have moments where they think they understand, and those moments give them hope.

In the fourth stanza, in the moments when the dragonflies come close by and are still, there is a hope and a chance of seeing them clearly and closely.  This is like the same moments that happen with ideas.

In the fifth stanza, if a person is patient and the dragonflies slow down, there is a chance to see them clearly.  This is related to a person with an idea, in that, if they are patient and take their time, there is a chance they become clear about their idea and find a solution.

In the sixth stanza, the dragonflies can be seen with all their colors when they slow down and a person is patient.  Again, this relates to a person thinking of a new idea.  The idea is, if the person slows down and they are patient, they can figure things out.

In the last stanza, the general idea of dragonflies is described.  It talks about them looking nice and flying around.  This realization happens after they are seen up close.  This again relates to ideas, in that once a person has thought of one, they realize that the inspiration for them is all around them.

In terms of form, as can be seen by the repeated lines, this poem is a pantoum.  Some effort was taken to make sure that the repeats made sense.

 

P. S. There is a new set of photography, artwork, poetry and fiction on MSakran.com.  In something different, the first part of the fiction is directly influenced by the poetry.  The poem lists a number of things and those things are alluded to in some way in the first part of the story.

Poem with an explanation: a cloth of resolve

Laying with motion,
in the pain,
of past mistakes,
thinking of resolve,
but then interwoven,
a doubtful thread,
as light flashes,
and moths fly,
eating the tapestry,
the pain flows,
the light dims,
the moths fly,
and blankets cover.

This poem is about resolving to change.

The poem goes through different stages.  The first stage, lines 1 -3, shows the person in the poem experiencing some sort of negativity from the way they have been.  An example might be, a person having a hangover after being drunk.

In the second stage, line 4, the person, in their pain, has a feeling of wanting to resolve.  The person is experiencing something they feel to be so negative, that they have a sense of wanting to change their life.  Continuing the example, this might be a moment where a person with a hangover is slumped over a toilet.  The person feels so bad, both physically and emotionally, that they are overcome with a feeling of not wanting this to happen again.

In the third stage, lines 5 – 9, the person has a moment of doubt.  They think back to previous times in their life when they resolved to do something, and realize that at those times, the resolve didn’t last.  They have a sense that when their physical condition improves, that they will rationalize their behavior and not change their ways.  They realize the error of this, but realize it as a reality.

In the fourth stage, lines 10 – 13, the person is brought back to reality by a sense of pain.  In the example, the person might suddenly experience a very negative physical feeling from the hangover.  This feeling is so strong, that it pushes away the doubt they have, and they resolve to resolve.

The main imagery in the poem was that of a piece of cloth.  The person’s resolve is described indirectly as cloth.  When the person has their feelings of doubt it is like a noticeable thread was woven into it.  When the person has a flashback, that light is described as something that attracts the moths of doubt.  The moths come and eat the cloth.  When the person has a new pain though, it dims the light of their flashback, they are brought back to reality, and the moths of doubt fly away.  When this happens, the cloth is intact, and the person can cover with it like blankets, and resolve to resolve.

The poem does have form.  Each line is three words long.  This was intentional and did affect the words of the poem.  For example, the line “a doubtful thread”, was originally, “a thread of doubt”.  It was changed for the form.  Hopefully the form choice was not initially noticeable and helped improve the poem by changing some of the expressions.

P.S.  Did you know that M. Sakran has an eBook of poems with explanations?  It is true.  It is called Understanding: poems with explanations.  If you liked this poem with an explanation, you might consider purchasing a copy of the book.  You can learn more about the book here: Understanding: poems with explanations.

Poem with an explanation: that eyes will see

Beside the straw,
upon the dusty ground,
the herbs lie,
and the rock that shines,
away the rocks,
are pushed away,
and as eyes close,
there is hope,
that hawks will see,
and that eyes will see.

This poem is about a person experiencing a medical condition that may have a sudden effect.  Think of a person with, for example, blood sugar problems, and they are concerned of a sudden change.

The person is about to go to sleep on their bed (the straw).  In their concern, they place medicine beside them on the floor (upon the dusty ground, the herbs lie).  They also have a phone on the floor (and the rock that shines – think of someone on a mountain shining a mirror so they can be seen).

The person leaves the door of their bedroom unlocked (away the rocks, are pushed away).  And as the person sleeps (and as eyes close), they hope that if something happens that others who live with them will come by (that hawks will see) and that they themselves will be alright and wake up in the morning (and that eyes will see).

The imagery used in the poem was that of a lone person in a rocky desert place, like might be seen in a western movie.  That was used to convey the idea of the person with the medical condition.

In some ways this is a poem about vulnerability.  The person realizes they may need help both from medicine and from others and they take steps for both of these.

There is some form to the poem, although it was not intentional.  The lines have a word count pattern of 3,4,3,5,3,3,4,3,4,5.  As can be seen all of the lines have a word count of 3, 4 or 5 lines.  Additionally, the poem is 10 lines long, which might be seen as a good number of lines for a form.