Poem with an explanation: The Plight of the Orange Spheres

behind the glass
nothing felt safe
the lion roared

 

This poem has three layers.

The first layer is just the poem itself and what it literally says.  In the poem, someone or some group is behind glass and they don’t feel safe from a lion.

The second layer, describes the literal situation more fully.  In the poem there are goldfish (orange spheres) that are in an aquarium.  They are afraid of a cat (lion) that is outside and wants to get them.

The third layer, relates to the coronavirus.  People are in their homes (behind glass), but don’t feel safe (nothing felt safe), from the virus (the lion).

The idea of the poem was to present three ideas with the same concept.

Poetry topic idea: goldfish

Today’s poetry topic idea is goldfish.  A poet could write about a number of things related to goldfish.  A poet could write about:

  • The contrast between goldfish and tropical fish. A poet could contrast the conditions under which they are kept, their size, their colors, and the perception people have of them.
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  • The idea that goldfish are ornamental fish. Goldfish are not kept for food and they aren’t kept for another purpose other than looking nice for people.  This idea of being “ornamental” could be examined.
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  • Different types of goldfish. Some types are comet, fantail, and the common goldfish.  A poet could learn about each type and their differences and use the ideas in poems.
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  • The idea of being common. Some people may view goldfish as common, as compared to more exotic tropical fish.  A poet could examine the idea of commonness and what it means.
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  • The existence of a goldfish in a tank. A poet could examine the existence of a goldfish in a tank – a defined space.  They could view it as confining, or they could examine it from the perspective of the size of the space relative to the fish.  They could look at the goldfish’s surroundings, what it eats, and what it experiences.
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  • The perception of humans as seen by goldfish. A poet could examine how a goldfish might perceive a person.

Here is an example poem using the idea of goldfish:

sitting in his house
looking out the window
the delivery man
brings the food

Poem: Fish food reality

The goldfish,
turned yellow,
when they learned,
what was really in,
fish food.

 

P.S.  Guess what?  Right now, you can send a poem to M. Sakran for consideration.  If M. Sakran likes your poem, it might be published on this blog.  Isn’t that an amazing opportunity?

If you’re interested in such amazement, then go to the Considerations page to learn more.  While the information on the page is a little long, the basic idea is pretty simple.  It’s basically three steps:

  1. Choose something from one or more of the following categories on this blog: Artwork Inspiration, Photo Inspiration, Poetry Topic Ideas, or Experimental Poetry Form.
  2.  

  3. Write a poem using that something.
  4.  

  5. Send the poem to M. Sakran.

That’s really the basic idea.  It’s easy.  Just see the Considerations page for more information.

Poem: Hello Mr. Goldfish

Hello Mr. Goldfish,
what do you see?

The goldfish said,
most gleefully,
“Sunshine and rain,
green leaves and snow,
the stars shine bright,
as blue skies glow.”

But Mr. Goldfish,
how can this be,
the things you say,
you cannot see.

The goldfish said,
as it swam so free,
“The things out there,
that cannot be,
they all are there,
if one can see.”

But Mr. Goldfish,
all eyes look out,
these things you see,
are not about.

The goldfish said,
with eyes so clear,
“The things are seen,
by those who hear.
The sun and rain,
green leaves and snow,
the shining stars,
and skies that glow,
they are about,
for those who see,
they can be seen,
most easily.
Just open eyes,
and open ears,
wipe off the tears,
and wipe off fears,
look on about,
at all that be,
and then these things,
you will all see.”

Experimental Poetry Form: Four blocks

This experimental poetry form includes the elements of layout on the page, line count, word count and repeats.

The form consists of four blocks.  They are laid out as follows:

Block 1                           Block 2

Block 3                           Block 4

The blocks as a group are centered (or roughly so).  Block 1 is to the upper left, Block 2 is to the upper right, Block 3 is to the bottom left and Block 4 is to bottom right.  There is more space between the columns than the between the rows.  The actual distances can be varied.

Secondly, each block consists of four lines of twenty words total.  There is no requirement regarding the number of words per line.

In terms of repeats, at least two words from Block 1, must appear in Block 2.  A different two words (at least) from Block 2, must appear in Block 3.  Finally, a further different two words (at least) from Block 3, must appear in Block 4.

Here is an example poem written in the form.  The repeated words are noted by being bold (first set), italicized (second set) and underlined (third set):

    Two fantail goldfish,                                                            The two knights battle,
    swim through a resin log,                                                   each with a steel long sword,
    eat amazon and rosette sword plants,                            upon a wide log,
    and play in the small bubbles.                                           that spans the fast moving river.

    The battle went on for days,                                                For days they fought on,
    over who would own the lone river,                                   beside the turbid flow,
    that flowed speedily beneath,                                             their swords moved speedily,
    the tank’s filter.                                                                      as each sought to claim the land.

Poem with an explanation: Ode to Oro

Ode to Oro

A piece of gold,
within the sea,
found from the shimmer.

Brought out to sky,
carried by the breeze,
to a far off lake.

And there the gold,
did find another,
and both did shine.

But something there,
it was not right,
and the gold began to fade.

The color went,
and flowed away,
until the gold was gone.

Then to the land,
what was there left,
was sent away.

The other left,
it still did shine,
but less brightly.

But through all this,
the gold was bright,
and still brightens the thoughts.

 

This poem is about a goldfish named Oro.  Oro is Spanish for gold.

In the first stanza, Oro is bought from a store.  He was spotted because of his bright color.

In the second stanza, Oro is carried home and brought to a fish tank.

When Oro gets to the tank, in the third stanza, he finds another goldfish there.  Both are happy.

But soon, in the fourth stanza, something is wrong.  Oro begins to get sick, and his color fades.

In the fifth stanza, Oro dies.

In the sixth stanza, Oro is buried in a yard.

In the seventh stanza, the other goldfish, is less happy.

In the last stanza, Oro is remembered.