Poem with an explanation: the plant wilted

the plant wilted
in the morning sun
searching for a cool breeze

This poem metaphorically describes a situation.  In the poem a person is outside working.  The person is represented by the plant.  The day is hot though and the person is affect by the heat even in the morning.  This is represented by the plant wilting.  The level of heat is referenced by the idea that the morning (rather than hotter afternoon) sun caused the effect.  The person then wants there to be a cool breeze for relief.  This is referenced by the idea of searching in the poem.  This idea also references the idea that person decides to go inside where there is air conditioning to get away from the heat.

This poem also has the idea that its meaning for a reader could change depending on how it is read (apart from the explanation above).  A reader could read the poem and think that the plant wilted and so went searching for a cool breeze, or they could read the poem and think the plant wilted while searching for a cool breeze.  These two situations are different and could impart different ideas.

Experimental Poetry Form: basic

Today’s experimental poetry form is called basic.  It is a basic form.  It has the following qualities:

  One stanza

  Ten lines

  Ten syllables per line

  Iambic pentameter

  Even lines rhyme

Here is an example poem written in the form:

Poor Jeb, he sat beneath the glaring sun,
as in the house the air was clean and cool,
and Jeb did call and hope that some would hear,
and that he would not seem to them a fool.
But in the house they did not know the heat,
and thought that Jeb he simply broke a rule,
they felt no sun like poor old Jeb did feel,
and in their minds no sides did fight a duel.
And Jeb’s poor eyes did shine beneath the sun,
as on the ground his tears did form a pool.

Bilingual Poem: it’s cold

It’s cold
the fires inside grow low
while the stoker fights the war
beyond the villagers rush
the fires grow high with light
and covered the man does sleep
it’s cold

 

Hace frío
los fuegos dentro de se ponen bajo
mientras el fogonero pelea el guerra
más allá los pueblerinos se apresuran
los fuegos se ponon alto con luz
y cubrió el hombre está duerme
hace frío

Experimental Poetry Form: cutting a deck of cards

This experimental poetry form is based off of the idea of cutting a deck of cards.  The base of the poem is five lines long.  Each line is different.  The base could be represented as:

A
B
C
D
E

After the base is written, the first two lines are moved as a set to the end of the poem and the poem is written out again.  It could be represented as:

C
D
E
A
B

This movement of lines is then repeated and the poem is written again as:

E
A
B
C
D

The movement is then repeated one last time as:

B
C
D
E
A

 

All of the pieces should be written as one poem, with each piece serving as a stanza, such as:

A
B
C
D
E

C
D
E
A
B

E
A
B
C
D

B
C
D
E
A

 

The main difficulty in the poem is finding lines that make sense in all the rearranged orders.  To help with that, punctuation, capitalization and indention can change from stanza to stanza.

Rearranging the lines as shown is not the same as mixing the lines up.  All that is happening in each set is that some part of poem is moved from the beginning to the end.  In each of the sets, there is one movement that would put the poem back in order.  For example, in the set EABCD, if the E line was moved to the end, the poem would be back in order.  This idea is part of the poetry form.  The idea is to examine moving lines instead of mixing up lines.

The main idea of the poetry form is to see how the expression changes when the lines are rearranged.  The tone of the poem can change depending on line order, and this change is part of the idea.

Here is an example poem written in the form:

The heat beat down,
upon the worn shape,
as images of collapsing filled the mind,
cars drove by,
and one took pity.

As images of collapsing filled the mind,
cars drove by,
and one took pity –
  the heat beat down,
  upon the worn shape.

And one took pity –
  the heat beat down,
  upon the worn shape,
  as images of collapsing filled the mind,
  cars drove by.

Upon the worn shape,
  as images of collapsing filled the mind,
  cars drove by,
  and one took pity,
the heat beat down.

Experimental Poetry Form: Centered Stanzas

Stanzas: 4

Alignment: Centered

Syllable counts per line of each stanza: 4, 8, 6, 4

Rhyming: second line of each stanza

Here is an example poem written in this form:

The sun blazed hot,
a branding iron from the sky,
searing those down below,
who walked the path.

Looking for help,
each drop of sweat a question why,
stumbling along asphalt,
in confusion.

In the bright sun,
collapsing there as vultures fly,
in the delirium,
seeing blue waves.

As the mind drifts,
and those birds circle up so high,
thoughts of white snow fade off,
as eyes grow dark.

Poetry topic idea: heat

Today’s poetry topic idea is heat.  Depending on which hemisphere a person lives in, there might be quite a large amount of heat where a person lives this time of year.  As time is spent in this heat, many poetry topic ideas can come.  A poet could think to write about:

  • The physical stress of being in the heat.
  • The relief that would be felt being in the cold.
  • The effect of the heat on plants.
  • The effect of the heat on animals
  • The effect of the heat on water.
  • A physical description of how the place is in the heat.
  • The desire for water.

Bilingual Poem: heat

heat
  searching for
                                                  a cool puddle

calor
  buscando para
                                                  un charco fresco

 

As a note, both the English and Spanish versions of this poem use the experimental Poetry Form: Indention and word counts.

Poem Series: Experimental Poetry Forms: Five sets of two: The air was cool

There was a change today,
   outside under the pale blue sky,
as green grass blades seemed like a sea of calm,
  the air was cool.
  This was different some months ago,
as in the heat the memory did sound –
  the air was cool.
Though now a voice did say,
   those words said then in remembrance,
  in the breeze as cool air did flow.

 

(31/40) Experimental Poetry Form: Five sets of two

 

P.S. Today on MSakran.com, there is a new set of photography, artwork, poetry and fiction.  This is the tenth set on the site.