Bilingual Poem: toilet repair

when repairing a toilet,
you must ignore the icky,
or the whole experience,
will go down the drain

 

cuándo reparando un excusado,
usted debe hacer caso omiso repugnante,
o la entera experiencia,
irá abajo el desaguardero

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Poem with an explanation: the darkness of irrationality

The darkness of irrationality,
in the twilight of sensibility,
the sounds and glimpses,
transform and grow,
and there in the shadows,
where the metal turns,
translucent forms,
hide in the fog.

 

This poem is about someone being afraid.  They are home alone, at night, and a sense of fear comes over them.

The first line, The darkness of irrationality, shows that the person’s fear isn’t founded on anything specific.  They have a fear that there is someone outside their home who wants to come inside and do them harm.  The person though, isn’t afraid of someone they know, or someone nearby, or something they heard in the news.  They are simply afraid.  They have a fear of what might or could be.

The second line, in the twilight of sensibility, is meant to contrast with the first.  While the person’s general fear is irrational, the idea of their fear isn’t.  There could be someone outside.  There is the real possibility of a home invasion or some other kind of harm.  There is a sense of sensibility in the person being aware and cautious of the possibility.  The person though, goes to the level of irrationality in the sense that they are continuously afraid of the idea.

The first line and the second line are meant to show a contrast through their form.  Both lines are ten syllables long.  The first line has darkness, while the second has twilight.  The first line has irrationality, while the second has sensibility.  The equal lengths paired with the opposite words shows the contrast of the ideas.

The third line, the sounds and glimpses, describes the audial and visual things that increase the person’s fear.  The person hears many noises.  Their heater makes a noise.  Their refrigerator makes a noise.  The house creaks.  They also see things like reflections or things out of the corner of their eye.  These things are interpreted by the person as signs of what they fear.  They believe each noise is someone outside and each sight might be someone inside.

The fourth line, transform and grow, refers to the sounds and glimpses of the third line.  As the person grows more afraid, the idea of what could be causing the sounds and glimpses grows.  The person becomes more afraid with each instance.

The fifth and sixth lines, and there in the shadows, where the metal turns, describes the unseen places of the person’s house.  They imagine that there is someone outside of these places trying to get in.  This “getting in” is described as a lock turning or, where the metal turns.  They have the horror movie image of a lock slowly turning, in their mind.

The eighth line, translucent forms, describes who the person is afraid of.  It is a vague image of a person.  It is what they imagine an intruder would look like.  It is a composite of criminal images they have seen.  The image is vague and not defined because the person is afraid of an idea more than of an actual person.  The vagueness is shown through the idea of the forms being translucent.

The last line, hide in the fog, shows that, partially, the person is afraid of the unknown.  They are afraid of what they can’t see outside.  Also, it shows the confusion of their fear.

This poem is about a person afraid alone at night in their house.  The idea of it is to describe, in some sense, the haziness of the person’s fear.  The person is afraid, but their fear, in some sense, isn’t based on anything substantial.  The person is mainly afraid of the possibility of something.  They, in some sense, want to be on guard for it.

The poem isn’t meant to criticize the person for their fear.  Describing the fear as irrational isn’t meant to imply that the person is.  The idea of the poem is meant to describe how an irrational fear can grow, even in a rational person, under certain conditions.

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Experimental Poetry Form: rhyming with syllable count for the rhyming words

This experimental poetry form focuses on rhyming, with the added feature of syllable count for the rhyming words.  Here are the specifics of the form:

One stanza

Six lines

Five words per line

Lines 1 and 4 rhyme

Lines 2 and 5 rhyme

Lines 3 and 6 rhyme

Lines 1 and 4 each end with a one syllable word

Lines 2 and 5 each end with a two syllable word

Lines 3 and 6 each end with a three syllable word

 

Here is an example poem to illustrate the form:

Radio play

There alone on the chair,
sitting by the radio seeing,
the man hiding there silently,
and imagining his cold glare,
knowing he’s a fictional being,
yet still running off violently.

Bilingual Poem: Train of life

Everyone else,
it seems,
stayed on the train,
but you got off,
not even knowing it,
and all the time later,
you wondered,
if you could,
ever catch up.

Todos los demás,
parece,
quedado en el tren,
pero usted ido del tren,
no hasta sabiendo lo,
y todo el tiempo más tarde,
usted preguntado,
si usted podido,
jamás alcanza uno.

Poetry topic idea: flying

Today’s poetry topic idea is flying.  There are lots of ways to use the idea of flying in poetry.  A poet could write about:

  • birds flying
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  • insects flying
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  • flying on planes
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  • flying in dreams
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  • flying objects
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  • unidentified flying objects
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  • flying as a metaphor for feelings

 

Here is an example poem that uses flying:

trying to fly,
in the dream,
can’t do more,
than leap high

Poem with an explanation: magnets change

There were words,
and words,
with the changing of the magnets

far off,
in the dim lights,
with 4 and 10,
the spotlight,
on the (intentional) accident

and not one,
but many,
like local news

and the grain,
against the grain,
shattering on the ground

and words,
and accidents,
and grains,

finally,

alone.

 

But …

 

in solitary confinement,
silence whispers,
and battles rage,
unseen

and magnets change,
and battles rage

the lions roar,
but a cage is built

the hurricane blows,
but the building stands

the grain is changed,
and bread is eaten

and magnets change,
among it all.

 

And …

 

a learning,
then a question,
a magnifying glass,
held up,
and down,

the words of others,
the lawyers stand,
a speech is given,
but by the sea,
it is unknown.

 

The magnets change,
and the magnets change,
and then a door,
does open.

 

This poem is about a husband and wife.  It is about the husband’s negative treatment of his wife and how that and their relationship progresses with time.  The poem is divided into four sections.

The first section describes the husband’s mistreatment of his wife.  He is verbally abusive (There were words, and words) and this has been something that has gone on for some time (with the changing of the magnets – magnets refers to refrigerator calendar magnets, the changing of which signifies the progression of time).

In addition to this constancy, there have also been a number of negative incidents.  An example is given in the second stanza.

The stanza describes a party after a wedding (far off, in the dim lights, with 4 and 10far off means they traveled, in the dim lights signifies the party, and with 4 and 10 represents that a DJ is there (D is the fourth letter of the alphabet and J is the tenth)).

At the party, the husband has an incident where he embarrasses and mistreats his wife.  It is an awkward noticeable moment (the spotlight, on the (intentional) accident).  The husband’s behavior is like a car accident in that people at the wedding can’t help but notice, but it is intentional behavior, which is unlike an accident.

This isn’t the only incident like this the husband has had.  His behavior has been this way over and over.  It is like the mention of accidents on the local news (and not one, but many, like local news).

In addition to all this, the husband drinks (and the grain – grain signifying alcohol).  His drinking negatively affects his behavior (against the grain) and like a bottle shattering on the ground it leads to negative bursts in his behavior.

All of these things continue (and words, and accidents, and grains) until finally his wife leaves him (alone).

The next section starts after the But.

When the man is alone (in solitary confinement) he begins to feel his conscience (silence whispers).  This starts an internal struggle within himself (and battles rage) that is unseen by others.

This struggle takes time (and magnets change, and battles rage), but eventually the man repents.

He learns to control what he says (the lions roar, but a cage is built), he stops having outburst in public (the hurricane blows, but the building stands) and he stops drinking (the grain is changed, and bread is eaten).

As time changes (and the magnets change) so does the man (among it all).

The next section starts after the And.

The wife learns of her husband’s change (a learning).  She questions its reality (then a question).  She examines his behavior (a magnifying glass, held up) and questions her feelings (and down – as in she is looking down through the magnifying glass at herself).

The friends and family of the woman speak to her about the situation (the words of others).  They speak against the man and the sincerity of his change (the lawyers stand).  They give what amounts to a collective speech against him (a speech is given).  The woman though is unsure of herself and what she should do (but by the sea, it is unknown).

The poem ends with ambiguity.  In the last section of the poem, time has passed (The magnets change, and the magnets change).  The man checks in different ways to see if his wife will come back to him (and then a door, does open).  The poem though, ends with just the door opening.  It doesn’t say if the wife is on the other side when it does.

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A photograph to inspire poetry: part of a squash plant

part of a squash plant

Above is a photograph of part of a squash plant.  The focus of the photograph is part of the plant that is new and growing.

An important aspect of this plant is timing.  The photograph was taken in late November.  There is a chance that temperatures will get cold enough in the near future, such that this plant will die.  Although the plant is attempting to grow and have fruit, there is a reasonable chance that it will fail because of circumstances that it can’t control.

This idea can be a metaphor for situations in life and can be used in poetry.  A poet could write about situations where a person makes an effort to accomplish something, but because of the timing and other circumstances, there is a high chance they will fail.

Some ideas a poet could write about are:

  • A person gives a performance right after another person gave a great performance.
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  • A person is remodeling a building in a place where a hurricane is expected to hit.
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  • A person gets a job at a company that shortly thereafter announces there will be layoffs.
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  • A small business releases a product, and shortly thereafter a large company releases a similar one.
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  • A person is trying make a large meal, when the power goes out.

Experimental Poetry Form: stanza with trochaic and dactylic meters

Today’s experimental poetry form uses two poetic meters: trochaic and dactylic.  The poem has one stanza with six lines.  The odd lines use trochaic meter and the even lines use dactylic.  The odd lines have three feet (for six syllables) and the even lines have two feet (also for six syllables).  Here is how the form looks:

*.*.*.
*..*..
*.*.*.
*..*..
*.*.*.
*..*..

The stressed syllables are noted with an “*” and the unstressed syllables with a “.”.

Here is an example poem written in the form:

Seeking shelter nearby,
energy vaporized,
empty footsteps taken,
quietly crumbling,
silent echoes seeking,
rescuing peacefulness.