Poem: Roller Coaster

Although they were polite,
they said he could not ride,
the roller coaster,
because the bar,
would not fit on him.

He had to walk,
the entire line back,
as he tried to look,
like nothing was wrong.

He sat at home that night,
and didn’t know what to say.

The next morning,
after he tied his laces,
and started to walk,
he knew next year,
he would ride the ride.

Poem with an explanation: a cloth of resolve

Laying with motion,
in the pain,
of past mistakes,
thinking of resolve,
but then interwoven,
a doubtful thread,
as light flashes,
and moths fly,
eating the tapestry,
the pain flows,
the light dims,
the moths fly,
and blankets cover.

This poem is about resolving to change.

The poem goes through different stages.  The first stage, lines 1 -3, shows the person in the poem experiencing some sort of negativity from the way they have been.  An example might be, a person having a hangover after being drunk.

In the second stage, line 4, the person, in their pain, has a feeling of wanting to resolve.  The person is experiencing something they feel to be so negative, that they have a sense of wanting to change their life.  Continuing the example, this might be a moment where a person with a hangover is slumped over a toilet.  The person feels so bad, both physically and emotionally, that they are overcome with a feeling of not wanting this to happen again.

In the third stage, lines 5 – 9, the person has a moment of doubt.  They think back to previous times in their life when they resolved to do something, and realize that at those times, the resolve didn’t last.  They have a sense that when their physical condition improves, that they will rationalize their behavior and not change their ways.  They realize the error of this, but realize it as a reality.

In the fourth stage, lines 10 – 13, the person is brought back to reality by a sense of pain.  In the example, the person might suddenly experience a very negative physical feeling from the hangover.  This feeling is so strong, that it pushes away the doubt they have, and they resolve to resolve.

The main imagery in the poem was that of a piece of cloth.  The person’s resolve is described indirectly as cloth.  When the person has their feelings of doubt it is like a noticeable thread was woven into it.  When the person has a flashback, that light is described as something that attracts the moths of doubt.  The moths come and eat the cloth.  When the person has a new pain though, it dims the light of their flashback, they are brought back to reality, and the moths of doubt fly away.  When this happens, the cloth is intact, and the person can cover with it like blankets, and resolve to resolve.

The poem does have form.  Each line is three words long.  This was intentional and did affect the words of the poem.  For example, the line “a doubtful thread”, was originally, “a thread of doubt”.  It was changed for the form.  Hopefully the form choice was not initially noticeable and helped improve the poem by changing some of the expressions.

P.S.  Did you know that M. Sakran has an eBook of poems with explanations?  It is true.  It is called Understanding: poems with explanations.  If you liked this poem with an explanation, you might consider purchasing a copy of the book.  You can learn more about the book here: Understanding: poems with explanations.