Poem with an explanation: Happiness again

Behind the bars,
looking out,
listening for a sound.

  Behind the bars,
  looking in,
  sitting in the silence.

The door opens,
eyes look up,
with hope.

  The door opens,
  eyes look down,
  in the emptiness.

Waiting each day,
seeing joy,
waiting for the turn.

  Waiting each day,
  seeing sadness,
  with nothing to wait for.

    Having a thought.

    Waiting.

    Having a thought.

    Waiting.

    Time passes.

    Waiting.

    Taking a step.

    Waiting.

Behind the bars,
looking out,
seeing the face.

  In front of the bars,
  looking in,
  seeing the face.

Happiness again.

 

This poem is about a person and a dog.  The person recently had their dog die and the dog in the poem is in an animal shelter.

The poem has stanzas with alternating focus for the most part (although how that is applied changes in the poem).  For the first six stanzas, the odd stanzas are from the perspective of the dog and the even stanzas are from the perspective of the person.

In the first stanza (Behind the bars, looking out, listening for a sound), the dog is in a cage at the shelter.  It is looking outside the cage bars hoping someone will come for it.

In the second stanza (Behind the bars, looking in, sitting in the silence), the person is alone at home.  Their dog has died and they are sad.  Their house feels like a prison (Behind the bars) and they are feeling loneliness.

In the third stanza (The door opens, eyes look up, with hope), the dog hears someone come into the shelter.  They look up hoping the person will pick them.

In the fourth stanza (The door opens, eyes look down, in the emptiness), the person opens the door to a room where their dog was.  The look down because they are sad because they are sad their dog is no longer there.

In the fifth stanza (Waiting each day, seeing joy, waiting for the turn), the dog in the shelter waits for someone to get it.  It sees the happiness of other dogs that are picked and it waits for its turn.

In the sixth stanza (Waiting each day, seeing sadness, with nothing to wait for), the person waits to feel better, but they are sad, and they feel like they have nothing to wait for because their dog is gone.

The first six stanzas follow a pattern.  They are grouped as pairs.  In each pair (stanzas 1 and 2, stanzas 3 and 4, and stanzas 5 and 6), the first line is the same and the second lines start with the same word and then have an opposite word (out/in, up/down, joy/sadness).  All the stanzas are three lines.

Stanzas seven through fourteen are the next set of stanzas.  In this set, the person’s perspective is shown in the odd stanzas, and the dog’s perspective is shown in the even.

In stanza seven, the person has the first thought of getting another dog.  In the eighth stanza, the dog waits.  In the ninth stanza, the person thinks of this more.  In the tenth stanza, the dog waits.  In the eleventh stanza, time passes.  In the twelfth stanza, the dog waits.  In the thirteenth stanza, the person goes to the shelter.  In the fourteenth stanza, the dog waits.

In stanzas seven through fourteen, the stanzas for the dog are all the same.

The next set of stanzas are stanzas fifteen and sixteen.

Stanza fifteen parallels stanza one, and has the same first two lines.  In this stanza (Behind the bars, looking out, seeing the face), the dog sees the person who has come to get it.

In the sixteenth stanza (In front of the bars, looking in, seeing the face), the person stands and sees the dog.  This stanza has the same second line as stanza two.

The last stanza is a combination of perspectives.  It shows the dog and person are happy again.

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Experimental Poetry Form: stanza with trochaic and dactylic meters

Today’s experimental poetry form uses two poetic meters: trochaic and dactylic.  The poem has one stanza with six lines.  The odd lines use trochaic meter and the even lines use dactylic.  The odd lines have three feet (for six syllables) and the even lines have two feet (also for six syllables).  Here is how the form looks:

*.*.*.
*..*..
*.*.*.
*..*..
*.*.*.
*..*..

The stressed syllables are noted with an “*” and the unstressed syllables with a “.”.

Here is an example poem written in the form:

Seeking shelter nearby,
energy vaporized,
empty footsteps taken,
quietly crumbling,
silent echoes seeking,
rescuing peacefulness.

A photograph to inspire poetry: Insect nest

Insect nest

This is a photograph of what appears to be an insect’s nest.  It may be a nest of something like a hornet or something similar.

This photograph can inspire a number of poetry ideas.  One idea would be the ideas of protection and shelter.  This nest presumably provides both, and those ideas could be used in a poem.  For example, a poet could write about finding shelter in the rain or about the idea of finding a place to feel protected.

Another idea that could be inspired by this photograph is the idea of construction.  This nest was constructed, and the idea of construction could be used in a poem.  Since the nest was built using natural materials (all be it, on a manmade wall) a poet might decide to write about a structure built with natural materials.  This could range from the idea of a temporary shelter in the woods, to a modern home built with natural materials incorporated.

Another idea that could be inspired by this photograph is the idea of vulnerability.  This nest is on a wall.  It could be easily damaged by rain, animals or human beings.  The idea of vulnerability could be used in a poem.  For example, using the ideas of protection, shelter and construction from above combined, a poet could write about someone building a shelter in the woods, for example when they are lost.  The poem could describe the construction of the shelter for the purpose of protection and have allusions to the vulnerability that the person has and feels.