Poem with an explanation: 1320

the statue crumbles

across the desert
in the distance
nothing is seen

the car rolls
on square tires

before the gate
floats in the mind

the pieces of stone
are in a pile
of 1320 pieces


This poem is about a person who is not physically fit, trying to become so.  On their first day of exercise they decide to jog.

In the first stanza of the poem, the person jogs a quarter of a mile.  A quarter of a mile is 1320 feet.  This is too much for the person and they become spent (the statue crumbles).

The person is very tired after this short distance.  They decide that they should go back home.  In the second stanza, they look back at the distance they have to go.

Although before they jogged, they thought a quarter of a mile was a short distance to traverse, now it seems very far.  They feel like they are looking out over a desert and are unable to see their destination.

In the third stanza, the person starts to walk home.  They are experiencing physical discomfort after the jog and they have trouble walking.  They move slowly like a car with square tires.  They feel all of the quarter mile.

In the fourth stanza, the person is home.  As they stand by their front door, they gain a new perspective on distance.  They think of 60 mph, which is the speed a car might travel.  This is 316800 feet an hour.  They think of this distance, and how it feels like nothing, and how the 1320 feet of the quarter mile feels like a lot.

In the last stanza, the person sits down on the floor of their house in the air conditioning.  They are tired after the jog.  The distance has become part of them.

Poem with an explanation: rejuvenation

Concrete wanders,
through desert sands,
a stone statue moving,
through desolate lands.

There at the gates,
silence stands,
before the iron walls,
with sentry bands.

Into the darkness,
a cave of four walls,
a ghost floats forwards,
through empty halls.

In the far distance,
the water calls,
as all is spent,
memory falls.

Eyes open wide,
a world is seen,
air fills the lungs,
and breath is clean.

Into the room,
where farmers glean,
a life gains form,
and isn’t so lean.

Elixir is poured,
and all seems bright,
as life flows through veins,
and glows with light.

Onto the clouds,
down low from their height,
the form does rest,
from all its plight.


This poem is about rejuvenation.  The poem is about a construction worker who comes home after a long, tiring day.

The form of the poem is four line stanzas.  The stanzas are in rhyming sets of two stanzas each with a rhyming pattern of ABCB DBEB.  There are four sets.

In the first stanza, the construction worker comes home.  The worker is described as concrete and a stone statue.  The worker’s day is described as desert sands and desolate lands.

In the second stanza, the worker stands at their front door.  The worker is described as silence and the door is described as gates, iron walls, and a place with sentry bands.

In the third stanza, the person is in their house.  The house is described as darkness, a cave of four walls and empty halls.  The worker is described as a ghost.

In the fourth stanza, the imagery changes.  Things become positive.  In this stanza the worker takes a shower.  The shower is described as being in the far distance and as calling water.  The person is tired in the shower and is described as having all spent.  The dirt on the person, their tiredness and symbolically the day are washed away in the shower.  This is described as memory falls.

In the fifth stanza, the person is out of the shower.  They are starting to feel rejuvenated.  This is described as Eyes open wide, a world is seen, air fills the lungs and breath is clean.

In the sixth stanza, the person goes to their kitchen and eats.  The kitchen is described as the room, where farmers glean.  The person eating is described as the life gaining form and not being so lean.

In the seventh stanza, the person drinks water.  The water is described as Elixir, and the drinking of it has an effect described as all seems bright, as life flows through veins, and glows with light.

In the eighth stanza, the person lies down on their couch to rest.  The couch is described as clouds, down low from their height.