Poem with an explanation: the hill, the valley, and the mountain

the hill
did look down
on the valley
and chastised it
for being so low

the wind blew
the rain fell

the mountain
looked toward the sky

 

This poem is about care for the elderly and perspective.  It is about relative positions in life.

In the poem there are three people: the valley, the hill, and the mountain.  The valley represents the elderly person.  The hill represents the adult child of the elderly person.  The mountain represents the child of the adult child.  This is three generations.

In the poem, the adult child is frustrated with their elderly parent.  They look down on them and chastise them for their physical incapability.  They can’t understand why the elderly person can’t be like themselves.

The adult child is oblivious to the progression of life.  In the poem there are three stages: a mountain, a hill, and a valley.  As a mountain erodes it becomes a hill.  As a hill erodes, it becomes a valley.  The adult child is criticizing their elderly parent for their physical incapability, not realizing they are moving in the same direction.  They don’t see their own erosion (represented by the wind and rain).  They don’t see where they’ve been, and they aren’t realizing where they are going.  They don’t realize they will be elderly someday, and therefore they don’t have compassion on someone who is elderly.

The mountain, representing the person in the third generation, has their focus somewhere else.  They don’t see the hill or the valley.  This shows that they are oblivious both to the treatment of their elderly relative, and of the reality that they will one day be in that position.  They don’t see the future implications for themselves.  They are concerned with other things.

It can sometimes occur in the care of the elderly, that the caregiver doesn’t see themselves in the one they care for.  They don’t see that they too will be in that position.  It can also be the case that younger generations are concerned about other things and don’t see the actions of caregivers or the condition of the elderly.  The poem is meant to highlight these things.

A photograph to inspire poetry: Rose of Sharon

Rose of Sharon

Above is a photograph of a flower that might be called Rose of Sharon.  It can inspire poetry.  For example, a poet might write about:

  • Some sort of occasion with yellow flowers.
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  • The change of colors from the outside to the in: Yellow, Red, Yellow, Brown.
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  • Something to do with the possible name of the plant.
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  • A comparison between the yellow flower and the sun.

 

Here is an example poem inspire by the photograph:

Shadows fall,
on the yellow hills,
as fires burn,
within the valley,
and the last tree stands,
unmoving.

Poem: from the hill, in the valley

And there,
from the hill,
they ran,
the jackals,
the wolves,
the laughing dogs,

alone,
in the valley,
meekness stood,

small,
shaking,
uncertain with fear.

The dust flew,
and rocks flew,
and hatred flew,
as the wild,
moved as though one.

There,
in the valley,
the meekness stood.

And as the eyes gleamed,
flashes occurred,
of figures in black.

Confusion,
and terror,
as clouds were lifted,
came upon,
the now shrieking,
coyotes.

The figures stood,
and without eyes,
stared at the dust.

And there on the hill,
they ran,
the jackals,
the wolves,
the laughing dogs,

as with others,
in the valley,
meekness stood.
 
P.S.  Right now, you can send a poem to M. Sakran for consideration.  If M. Sakran likes your poem, it might be published on this blog.

If you’re interested, then go to the Considerations page to learn more.  While the information on the page is a little long, the basic idea is pretty simple.  It’s basically three steps:

  1. Choose something from one or more of the following categories on this blog: Artwork Inspiration, Photo Inspiration, Poetry Topic Ideas, or Experimental Poetry Form. You can find things from the Posts List page.
  2.  

  3. Write a poem using that something.
  4.  

  5. Send the poem to M. Sakran.

That’s really the basic idea.  It’s easy.  Just see the Considerations page for more information.