Poem with an explanation: standing outside

standing outside
checking the time again
waiting two more minutes
and then a call
there’s probably a reason

 

In this poem, a person thinks they may have been stood up for a date.

The person in the poem is standing outside the place where the date is to take place (standing outside).  Their date is late and they have checked the time multiple times while they have waited (checking the time again).  They set a threshold time to wait for before calling to see why their date isn’t there.  That time is two minutes away (waiting two more minutes).  They want to believe their date is not there for a reason other than they have been stood up (there’s probably a reason).

 

P. S. This blog post is the one thousand five hundred and sixty second blog post on the blog. As was noted in the post for the six year anniversary for the blog, the blog will be ending soon.

A decision has been made that the last new blog post on the blog will be number one thousand six hundred.  That means that there are thirty eight new blog posts to post.  Although it may change, the last new blog post should be posted on August 20, 2020.  Thank you to everyone who has read something on the blog.

Poem with an explanation: Maybe it’s broken?

Checking the email
for the fourteenth time

nothing’s bold.

Maybe it’s broken?

 

This poem is about a person waiting for a message.  They are checking their email repeatedly (so far, fourteen times in one day), but have not received a message they are waiting for.  More than this, the person hasn’t received any messages (nothing’s bold – new messages are bold in their email).

The person is anxious to get this message and the fact that they haven’t received it causes them to wonder if something’s wrong.  They question if their email is broken.

The person is worried and anxious and tries to find an explanation for the situation, which actually causes them more worry.

Poem with an explanation: waiting for one

waiting for one
the oranges hide
from the thought of expression

 

This poem is about jack-o-lanterns on Halloween.

In the poem, pumpkins (oranges) are hiding.  They don’t want to be turned into jack-o-lanterns (the thought of expression – jack-o-lanterns have faces that express an emotion).  They are waiting until November first (waiting for one) at which point no one will want them for jack-o-lanterns anymore.

Although this poem focuses on a silly idea, the ideas could be applied to other situations.  Think, for example, of a person hoping a meeting or class or something else ends before they are called upon.  They are waiting for a time to pass so they won’t have to speak.  It could be they are nervous or afraid to do so.  The general idea is the same.

Poetry topic idea: time

Today’s poetry topic idea is time.  There are a number of ways a poet could write about time.  Some of them include writing about:

  • The past
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  • The present
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  • The future
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  • Running out of time
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  • Aging
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  • A specific time
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  • A specific moment in time
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  • Infinity
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  • The end of time
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  • The relativity of time
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  • Waiting
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  • Too much time
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  • Things that are timed
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  • The time it takes to do things
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  • The measurement of time
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  • Telling time

 

Here is an example poem about time:

sitting in the room
feeling every tick
when will the door open

Poem Series: Time: surgical waiting room

There are those
who speak of relativity
that it changes
by how you go.

Though they speak
of speed
they should speak
of stillness.

Sitting there
the hands moving
surrounded by stillness
it moves strangely.

It starts and stops
it jumps
it leaps
and falls.

The door opens
does death walk through?

The door opens
is there nothing there?

Though its passage
is wanted
its reversal
is more so.

To have it move
to have it run
to have it leap
and know the answer.

To have it move
to have it run
to have it leap
and know the truth.

The hands move
the door opens
the hands stop
the heart stops.

In a moment
of countless hours
signs and signals
are confusedly read.

After the moment
of countless seconds
everything falls
or lifts to the sky.

The truth
of relativity
is known not in space
but in the waiting room.

Artwork to inspire poetry: rose

Rose

Above is an artwork of a rose.  It can inspire poetry.  Here is a poem inspired by it:

waiting all winter
for you to return
counting the moons

 

P. S. This is the one hundredth “singular” artwork to inspire poetry on this blog. It is the one hundredth artwork to inspire poetry that isn’t in some way part of something else, such as a post series.

Experimental Poetry Form: Stair step

This experimental poetry form is called stair step.  The form has twelve lines.  Each line has two words.  There is a line break between each line.  The first line is not indented.  The second line is indented two spaces.  The third line is indented four spaces.  The fourth line is indented six spaces.  This continues, with each line being indented two spaces more than the line before it, until the twelfth line, which is indented twenty two spaces.

When using the form, a poet could make the lines a broken up sentence or series of sentences, or they may choose to have each line be more independent to some degree.  Also, the lines could be self-contained or need other lines for context.  There is a lot of choice in the use of the form.

Here is an example poem written in the form.

There’s hope,

  waiting here,

    with wonderment,

      and silence.

        Will this,

          all this,

            somehow work,

              somehow flow,

                and life,

                  will change,

                    and waiting,

                      will cease?

P.S. Do you like this experimental poetry form? Are you thinking about writing a poem using it? Why not write one and send it to M. Sakran for consideration? If M. Sakran likes it, it might get published on this blog. See the Considerations page for more information.

Post Series: Poems with Explanations: Waiting in darkness

covered in darkness
sitting between the two walls
waiting for the noise
walking down the concrete rows
mind lost in all the boxes

 

This poem about is about a child and her mother.  The mother of the child works two jobs, one of which is a second shift.  The child is left home alone during this shift.

In the poem, the first three lines are about the child and the last two lines are about the mother.  This poem is a tanka, written in 5 7 5 7 7, and this form lent itself to the two subjects of the poem.

The poem starts (covered in darkness) with the child home alone at night.  The child is scared.  The fear the child has is conveyed by the idea of darkness covering.

The child doesn’t sleep because she is afraid.  Instead, she stays awake and sits on the floor in the corner of her room (sitting between the two walls).  She is sitting in her pajamas, with her knees up, her arms around her legs, and her head down.

In her fear, the child is waiting to hear the noise of her mother opening the front door (waiting for the noise).  She has stayed up before and knows what the sound of the key turning the lock sounds like.  She is anticipating the noise.  She wants it to happen.  When her mother comes home, she will feel comfort and be able to sleep.

The next two lines of the poem are about the mother.  She works in a warehouse.  There are rows and rows of shelves with bays.  The bays are filled with boxes.  The floor is concrete.  The mom walks down the rows (walking down the concrete rows) loading things onto a cart to be sent somewhere else.

The mom’s job is demoralizing.  It is dark, everything is gray and brown.  There is a certain sound to the place.  The job is tedious and monotonous.  As the mom does her job, she just passes the time and turns her mind off (mind lost in all the boxes).

One interesting aspect of this poem, is the idea that it does not come to a conclusion.  The poem shows the daughter sitting in her room afraid and the mother at work.  In the poem, the mother is never showed coming home.  The daughter’s fear is never relieved.  This poem looks at a specific moment that recurs, but does not, in some sense, finish the moment.

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Do you like poems with explanations?

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To help celebrate the self-publication of this book, there is a post series of poems with explanations on the blog.  Above is a poem with an explanation for the series.  This poem with an explanation (as well as the rest in the series) is not from the book.  It is a different one that is part of this post series for readers to read and enjoy.

Poem: wait the time

And so all sit and wait the time,
to hear the words that do not rhyme,
and find the news of what will be,
when hopes will come or hopes will flee,
and hear the words that may not chime.

Somewhere the hill they all do climb,
to find a sprig of hope not thyme,
and they do go and try to see,
and so all sit and wait the time.

And one does move much like a mime,
who does a show for just one dime,
no words are heard of pain or glee,
as eyes do look to the far sea,
and see the cliffs that are white lime,
and so all sit and wait the time.