Poem with an explanation: How is the sky?

They sky is cloudy,
there in the east,
see the darkness,
the weather is bad.

The sky is clear,
there in the west,
see the light,
the weather is good.

 

This poem is about presenting a point of view.  In the poem, there are two people.  One person says the first stanza and the other person says the second.

In the poem, both people are telling the truth, but they are each giving only one view of it and are therefore distorting the truth.  The first person wants those listening to think the weather is bad.  The second person, wants people to think the weather is good.

The idea in this poem applies to many arguments.  In arguments, people sometimes have a tendency to present a view of the truth that supports their position, while ignoring views that don’t.

Experimental Poetry Form: forwards and backwards

Today’s experimental poetry form is called forwards and backwards.  The form consists of two stanzas each with five lines.  The stanzas are mirror images of each other.  The first line of the second stanza is the same as the fifth line of the first stanza.  The second line of the second stanza is the same as the fourth line of the first stanza.  This continues with the rest of the lines.  The pattern looks as follows:

A
B
C
D
E

E
D
C
B
A

In writing the form, both stanzas should make sense.  To help with this, it might help to write both stanzas simultaneously, writing the matching lines at the same time and making sure they make sense.

Other than both stanzas making sense and the pattern above, the form has no other requirements.  Here is an example poem written using the form:

The rain did fall
upon the ground
while the lightning struck
and the thunder roared
as the sky darkened.

As the sky darkened
and the thunder roared
while the lightning struck
upon the ground
the rain did fall.

Poem with an explanation: tornado

Not sunshine,
but not storms,
some clouds,
but generally sunny.

Then,
not a hurricane,
a tornado,
in that instant,
your house.

So there,
beside the rubble,
a stillness,
and then a journey.

 

This poem has an imagery and an underlining meaning.  The imagery is that of weather.  The underlining meaning is that of a person losing their job.  The imagery of weather was used to relate the emotion of the experience.

The first stanza, describes a person’s opinion of their job: it’s alright.  It’s not great, it’s not bad, it’s just alright.

The first line, Not sunshine, describes the person’s view that their job is not great.

The second line, but not storms, expresses the view that it isn’t bad though.

The next two lines, describes how the person views their job.  Some clouds, but generally sunny, is meant to mean that the person has some bad days and moments at work (some clouds) but that overall, it’s okay (but generally sunny).

The second stanza, describes the person losing their job.

The first line, Then, is meant to express transition.  This is the end of the ordinary and the status quo situation.

The next two lines, not a hurricane, a tornado, is meant to mean that the person lost their job all of a sudden and without a warning.  A hurricane could be thought of as something that takes time to happen.  A tornado, happens in an instant.  That imagery is used to describe the situation.

The last two lines, in that instant, your house, is meant to express the personal nature of what has occurred.  There is a cliché, that bad things will happen to other people.  These two lines express the idea that the bad thing happened to this person.  The idea is to express the personal aspect of the situation.

The last stanza, describes the person right after they lost their job.  The image is of a person standing beside a destroyed house.  It is quiet, still and unreal.  That is expressed in the first three lines, So there, beside the rubble, a stillness.

The last line of the stanza, starts the moment of the person moving forward.

In terms of form, this poem is three stanzas long.  The first stanza is four lines long, the second is five, and the third is four.

The first stanza has a word count pattern per line of 2, 3, 2, 3.  The second stanza has a pattern of 1, 3, 2, 3, 2.  The third stanza has a pattern of 2, 3, 2, 4.  Written out, this looks like:

2
3
2
3

1
3
2
3
2

2
3
2
4

Thinking of word count, was not a factor in writing this poem.  However, it can be seen from the above, that there is almost a pattern present.

If pattern was important, the one word line could have been made to be two words and the four word line could have been made to be three words long.  That would have made the first and last stanzas have a pattern of 2323 and the middle stanza have a pattern of 23232, in terms of word count per line.

If additional pattern was desired, the last stanza could be further altered so that the entire poem would have alternating two word and three word lines.

Poem Series: Experimental Poetry Forms: Five sets of two: The air was cool

There was a change today,
   outside under the pale blue sky,
as green grass blades seemed like a sea of calm,
  the air was cool.
  This was different some months ago,
as in the heat the memory did sound –
  the air was cool.
Though now a voice did say,
   those words said then in remembrance,
  in the breeze as cool air did flow.

 

(31/40) Experimental Poetry Form: Five sets of two

 

P.S. Today on MSakran.com, there is a new set of photography, artwork, poetry and fiction.  This is the tenth set on the site.

Poem series: Weather: Number Five

The wind blows,
and leaves shake,
and the rain beats against the window.
It’s dark,
but daytime.
The power may go out.
The ground fills with water.
Trees move in the wind –
they may fall down.
Branches fall.
The wind makes a rush of sound.
The rain blows across instead of falling down.
This lasts for hours,
not minutes,
like in other times.
It does not have a slow rise,
then a peak,
then a fall.
The rise is quick,
things are dark quickly,
and the peak keeps going.
The windows may break.
The door of the porch,
opens and shuts.

Poem series: Weather: Number Two

The crystals fall upon the ground
and cover it without a sound,
and each are clear when seen alone,
but groups of them have whiteness shown,
and the crystals they form the snow,
that all on sight do clearly know,
and men of snow do stand outside,
where leafless trees do now reside,
and hills of snow do cover lawns,
and dens of small fur covered fawns,
and the white snow does last for weeks,
as ice does form on flowing creeks,
and the crystals that fell this year,
in some short months will disappear.